ENG 204-001

1. In the invitations, maybe showcase a main point or theme that would be interesting to college students. In the email, perhaps you could spend more time appreciating their patronage; i.e. it could be longer.

2. No

3. Email invitations, hard copy thank you letter.

4. Yes

5. Yes

6. On a scale of 1-10, I'd give you an 8. Again, your thank you emails need to be more thought out than just a few closing remarks.

7. Yes

1. Is there any information that should be included in the thank you letters or the invitations?
No I think your group provided all the necessary information for the invitation and thank you letters. Maybe just some examples of projects included in the showcase.

2. Is there any unnecessary information that should be taken out?
No you kept it really simple and to the point. All the information was provided. There were a couple grammar errors in the thank you letter, but thats it!

3. What medium (email, html, hard copy…) would be best for the invitations and/or the thank you
letters?
I think an email would be sufficient for the invitation because most students check their email on a regular basis. An actual letter would be good for the thank you because it shows you took time and it is more personal.

4. Are both documents keeping with the needs, values, and expectations of the English in action
showcase?
Yes, they are getting the point across about the english in action showcase.

5. Are these same needs, values, and expectations met in the proposal report?
Yes, you explained each step really well and I understood what you are trying to acomplish with your documents.

6. On a scale of 1 to 10 how effective are these documents (10 being the most effective)? Why?
I would say an 9. Your email is really well done, its catchy and to the point so college students will be more likely to read it. The thank you letter was really well done, maybe mentioning the speicifc project that you're thanking them for would make it even more personal.

7. Does the proposal report clearly define the client documents?
Yes I understood what the documents were and what you were trying to acomplish even before I looked at the documents.

1. There is a typo in your letter. "We encourage you in to send submissions" in the third sentence is not gramatically correct. Also, in the sentence right after that one, you repeat yourself unnecessarily- "if you are not already in it".
2. Nothing should be taken out.
3. Probably email and hard copys if you have a location to send them to.
4. I think with the correction of typos, both documents will be exemplary examples of UNCW's English excellence.
5. I feel that the proposal report reflects everything that needs to be conveyed. The descriptions of the email strategies is good and the use of HTML is a good idea.
6. 8 - With a little cleaning up and revision, I think it will be a 9. And no one is perfect so you can't get a 10.
7. Yes, very clearly. Especially the email. Goodjob on that one.

Just some general comments. I would delete the initial capitalized "THANK YOU". The body of the letter will communicate appreciation. In the body of the thank you letter, "You" is not capitalized (except in German). Also, do the students submit one or more than one piece? This will clarify whether you're thanking them for a submission or submissions. The second sentence is not grammatically correct--use punctuation as needed (commas). The fourth sentence beginning "If you are not..." is redundant, as the first and last parts of the sentence are the same. Restructure this sentence. In the last sentence, you are thanking the students for their "patience". Why? Did they have to wait? Are you apologizing for something? Just thank them for coming and end it. Also, provide website information about coming events in the English department and provide info about the "majors/minors" webpage for the department. Lastly, hyphenate the words English in action.

1. You should talk about the importance and honor of submitting their works to this event.

2. You are redundant in some of your sentences, so it does not make sense.

3. E-mail and hard copy.

4. I guess, it was kind of hard to tell exactly what you are doing because you didn't show what an invitation looked like. You only gave an example of a thank you letter. So, I honestly, do not not know if this is going along with the needs of the English in Action Showcase.

5. The proposal makes more sense, but I don't understand what are the two different forms of documents. You do not have examples of both, so I cannot tell what I am supposed to be evaluating.

6. 4 or 5. I have no idea what your e-mail invite looks like. The e-mail thank you later makes sense, but I don't really know what is going on.

7. You need to have two separate sections for the two separate documents. The way your proposal is formatted right now, it looks like you are just talking about the e-mail thank you letter.

Your proposal is good; it must have been difficult writing at length about the purpose, context, etc. of a thank you note. I didn't find in your docs an example emails, which would be nice to see. Also important would be the title of your email, as most students filter through and delete emails on the basis of perceived importance to their academic lives. The thank you note needs a lot of work, as copied above in my other post.