1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
I would suggest that you state something else in your current objective, such as what you would want to bring to that position. So, “To obtain the Outside Sales Admissions Representative position with the Lincoln Technical Institute to…(do what?).
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
One thing I would suggest to you is to list the title of your position and then the name of the company or affiliation. That way your heading for each job will be in bold and I will know exactly where each job begins. Also, under the section Affiliations/Leadership Experience, I look at it and just see a massive blur of text and it becomes more difficult than it needs to be to read. I would suggest going through and putting a blank line after each thing you have listed there. Now, this will put you over one page, but this can be easily fixed as well. One thing you can do is change the font size wherever you have a blank line to size 8. Another thing is to reduce the top and bottom page margins. I went ahead and tried it on your resume and you would only have to reduce it one-tenth of an inch, which is no big deal.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
Yes. Even if you make the changes mentioned above, it will still be a good fit.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
The text you used may actually be able to be increased in font size; it seems slightly small as it is. You have additional room in your margins that could be reduced as well to give more space to compensate for increasing the size of your text.
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
You used headers, bold, and all caps to draw attention to different sections and the points listed under them.
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
For the most part. The only thing that really needs to be changed is what I commented on earlier about putting the title of the position before the name of the company.
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
Yes. You listed past sales experiences that show you know what you are doing in this field. I also liked how you listed your computer skills. This is something that this company would probably want to know about you.
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
No. You have multiple bullets under each position that lets the reader know exactly what you did. Good job.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
Everything should be in reverse chronological order. The two items listed under Community Service should be switched. Everything else seems to be all right.
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
Yes. All bulleted items use strong action verbs and are listed in order of importance.
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
Yes. It is written very professionally for a specific audience so it uses specific information. Well done.
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
No. You should have all the dates and locations on the right side aligned together and carry it throughout the entire resume.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
Since your GPA is below 3.4, you may consider just listing your major GPA. Other than that, just pay close attention to all the comments I made in #2. I think they should help you.
1. To make your resume look more tailored to the specific job I would suggest that you maybe organize your work experience a little more. Your work experience is very important because it mostly pertains to sales.
2. To make the resume more appealling to the eye I would just add more organization but still keeping it to one page.
3. The resume fits one page.
4. For the most part your resume is easy to read, one thing I have already suggested though would be the organization of the resume.
5. The typographics are used appropriately.
6. The only thing I can reccomend on this question would be to better place your GPA because it is very impressive.
7. Your resume supports your objective.
8. The resume is not too short, and probably just about the right length, one page.
9. The material is definetly sequenced in order.
10. For the most part your bulleted items begin with an action words, there are some places where you could elaborate more.
11. Within the resume, she definetely focuses on specific wording that would really help in getting the job.
12. For the most part all tests are passes, I would suggest more organization with the spacing, some of the resume can be confusing at times.
13. Overall the resume is very well put together. Above I listed a few suggestions but I believe you did pretty good. Good Job!
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1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
I would suggest that you state something else in your current objective, such as what you would want to bring to that position. So, “To obtain the Outside Sales Admissions Representative position with the Lincoln Technical Institute to…(do what?).
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
One thing I would suggest to you is to list the title of your position and then the name of the company or affiliation. That way your heading for each job will be in bold and I will know exactly where each job begins. Also, under the section Affiliations/Leadership Experience, I look at it and just see a massive blur of text and it becomes more difficult than it needs to be to read. I would suggest going through and putting a blank line after each thing you have listed there. Now, this will put you over one page, but this can be easily fixed as well. One thing you can do is change the font size wherever you have a blank line to size 8. Another thing is to reduce the top and bottom page margins. I went ahead and tried it on your resume and you would only have to reduce it one-tenth of an inch, which is no big deal.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
Yes. Even if you make the changes mentioned above, it will still be a good fit.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
The text you used may actually be able to be increased in font size; it seems slightly small as it is. You have additional room in your margins that could be reduced as well to give more space to compensate for increasing the size of your text.
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
You used headers, bold, and all caps to draw attention to different sections and the points listed under them.
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
For the most part. The only thing that really needs to be changed is what I commented on earlier about putting the title of the position before the name of the company.
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
Yes. You listed past sales experiences that show you know what you are doing in this field. I also liked how you listed your computer skills. This is something that this company would probably want to know about you.
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
No. You have multiple bullets under each position that lets the reader know exactly what you did. Good job.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
Everything should be in reverse chronological order. The two items listed under Community Service should be switched. Everything else seems to be all right.
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
Yes. All bulleted items use strong action verbs and are listed in order of importance.
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
Yes. It is written very professionally for a specific audience so it uses specific information. Well done.
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
No. You should have all the dates and locations on the right side aligned together and carry it throughout the entire resume.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
Since your GPA is below 3.4, you may consider just listing your major GPA. Other than that, just pay close attention to all the comments I made in #2. I think they should help you.
Peer Review of Resumes using the questions
1. To make your resume look more tailored to the specific job I would suggest that you maybe organize your work experience a little more. Your work experience is very important because it mostly pertains to sales.
2. To make the resume more appealling to the eye I would just add more organization but still keeping it to one page.
3. The resume fits one page.
4. For the most part your resume is easy to read, one thing I have already suggested though would be the organization of the resume.
5. The typographics are used appropriately.
6. The only thing I can reccomend on this question would be to better place your GPA because it is very impressive.
7. Your resume supports your objective.
8. The resume is not too short, and probably just about the right length, one page.
9. The material is definetly sequenced in order.
10. For the most part your bulleted items begin with an action words, there are some places where you could elaborate more.
11. Within the resume, she definetely focuses on specific wording that would really help in getting the job.
12. For the most part all tests are passes, I would suggest more organization with the spacing, some of the resume can be confusing at times.
13. Overall the resume is very well put together. Above I listed a few suggestions but I believe you did pretty good. Good Job!