I think your resume is well written. The content in the resume supports the objective of the resume because your objective is to gain further career experience in the marketing area by utilizing my leadership and public relations skills. By looking at the resume i can see that u have had some leadership and Public relation skills by being a Liberian Assistant and helping children finding books and also have experience being a teachers Assistant. I like the way you broke down your resume basically meaning how you formated your resume.
1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
I think it is great to put the volunteer experience you had because it shows leadership and public relationship skills.
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
The design seems fine but I would like you to highlight a few important points.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
The resume does fit comfortably within the page, but probably you add a few more points to the resume. I guess the font is a little large.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
The resume is very easy to read as well as follow, but a little confusing towards the part which has the company name and city.
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
The typography seems fine but I would ask you to Italics or bold which bring up the effect of the resume and look a little more attractive. Using these things would show a difference in points you want to bring out.
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
Your address section seems fines. I would not prefer any changes.
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
Yes. Having past experience of being a teacher and a librarian clearly indicates the resume supports the objective as they show qualities like public relation and leadership,
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
I think it’s a little short. You could add more points towards your skills Or can elaborate more on your education aspect.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
I think you have done a perfect job for this one.
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
Most of the bullets start with action verbs some have them missing. I am sure you can do better at that.
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
I think most of the things are perfect. I would like you to elaborate a little more on your skills and achievements.
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
The resume seems to pass all the tests, just make the resume little longer and the font used a bit smaller.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
I think you overall have done a good job but according to me I have told you about what changes you can bring about. Hope the suggestions help.
Before I start I just want to let you know I'm in a pretty technical field and am expected to constantly critique peer work, so please do not take anything I say too hard or too personally. Now, that that's out of the way; your resume has a good format to it, but there are a few things that would make it even better in my opinion (strictly formatting wise).
Under work experience your company names/location do not line up, "Omnuri" is farther left than "Children's", these are both also out of line with "New Orleans" in the Volunteer section. It will help the eyes scan and make it look more professional if you could get these to line up with each other, if you're having trouble like I usually do when trying to format too much in word, you may want to try a one row table for each of those lines as long as you can keep everything else in line. Also, your second bullet under work experience is out of line when it word wraps, the second line of that bullet is left of the line above it. It would look better if they were lined up with each other or even if the line under it was slightly indented. I actually believe that is the way the resume in the reading from week one was formatted, so that if your line word wrapped, the preceding lines would be slightly indented. One final note for alignment before I stop myself, all the dates on the right side of the page are not aligned, I would get them so that they all start from the same spot on the page from the left. That way they look flush and more professional.
Enough of formatting for now, I'm not an English major so I know I'm only so good at helping with proper formatting, punctuation, etc. On to other things that I think would help you out a bit. In your work experience section, I believe you mean "Librarian Assistant" not "Liberian" Also, your first two bullet points under this position start with different tenses "Helping" and "Read" I would change the first bullet to "Helped children find and return books to the shelves." But again, this may be partially personal preference but I do think you need to keep the tense the same throughout. It's something I mess up on a lot, so I know it can be pretty hard to do when you're writing. Your Volunteer Experience section is a perfect example of maintaining the same tense and looks and reads well because of it.
Moving on to the Skills section, I like the way you listed your skills but for some reason my eyes keep blurring the "Foreign Language" in with the "Computer". I'm not sure if it is because the Computer skills line is so long it makes it look like the Foreign Language line is word wrapped or what, but they blur together when I read it. It could just be my eyes though, but if you made "Computer" and "Foreign Language" bold, it makes it easier to read. Again I think this just helps read the resume faster and it could be just me.
Finally the dates in your activities section are future dates. You have Fall 2007 listed and that hasn't come yet this year. I'm pretty sure you meant 2006.
Overall it's a pretty good resume, I know it seems like I picked out a ton of problems but it really isn't that bad. I'm pretty picky, but I like to think employers are too. You did a good job, and just a few tweaks here and there and you'll have a great resume.
**edit: I removed a comment I made about the bullets
1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
Your objective states that you want an internship in the marketing area. If you want to make it more specific, you could narrow it down. For example, you could say a sports marketing internship or whatever area the opening involves.
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
The layout is nice. You are consistent with headings. The only part that runs together is under work experience. Your heading and job title are both bold. Maybe try italics or shading to help distinguish.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
The resume does fit within a page. It does look a little stretched out due to your spacing. You could single space it and give more details on how your previous experience would help with this position. It sounds like you were very involved at your jobs; maybe mention if you had to do anything in groups, etc.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
Like I said before it is very consistent. The only suggestion I had was under work experience.
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
Your resume does a good job being consistent with headings. The indentations bring focus to each section.
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
The important sections are bolded. My suggestion is to put your skills under your education since you probably acquired some, such as computer skills, in school.
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
The content supports for the most part. Your mention of teamwork under volunteer experience is good. You might want to put some similar descriptions under your work experience. If possible try to link past experience with what the internship desires.
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
The resume is a decent length. You could possibly elaborate your past experiences.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
The material is in a good order except the skills as I mentioned before.
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
Not all the items begin with action verbs, such as your work experience. Also, try to make sure they are in the same tense (i.e. helped and read, not helping and read).
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
The resume gives good details.
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
The resume evenly distributes information. The font size is easy to read. The only thing I have found is at the bottom under activities and honors the dates of involvement are not aligned. Maybe try columns to help organize.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
The resume is good overall. Maybe add a little more description. The layout is nice.
1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
I think the information satisfies the jobs requirements.
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
yes.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
yes.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
yes
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
I think that the school's name and the degree should be bold because they are one of the most important information on the resume. The degree establishes a link between the job applied for and your background.
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
The job title in the experience section is provided, but I think that the company name should be put in the next line so as to be aligned with the left margin. As i read the articles posted on the instructor blog i figured out that the company name matters a lot to the employer and itll be easier for him to find it while scanning.
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
Yes. the leadership thing is portrayed by 1. "Teaching Korean to foreign workers who have difficulties in speaking and reading Korean." 2. "Responsible for preparing teaching materials and checking daily homework."
Also the minor in communications helps develop the qualities for public relations.
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
no. Its perfectly alright.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
yes.
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
yes, they all do.
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
It will be great if you could put something in the job tasks which would directly suggest the qualities required for public relations and leadership.
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
yes the resume passed all the tests.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
You forgot to provide the present and the permanent address. Very important for the employer for correspondence.
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I think your resume is well written. The content in the resume supports the objective of the resume because your objective is to gain further career experience in the marketing area by utilizing my leadership and public relations skills. By looking at the resume i can see that u have had some leadership and Public relation skills by being a Liberian Assistant and helping children finding books and also have experience being a teachers Assistant. I like the way you broke down your resume basically meaning how you formated your resume.
Resume Feedback
1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
I think it is great to put the volunteer experience you had because it shows leadership and public relationship skills.
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
The design seems fine but I would like you to highlight a few important points.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
The resume does fit comfortably within the page, but probably you add a few more points to the resume. I guess the font is a little large.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
The resume is very easy to read as well as follow, but a little confusing towards the part which has the company name and city.
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
The typography seems fine but I would ask you to Italics or bold which bring up the effect of the resume and look a little more attractive. Using these things would show a difference in points you want to bring out.
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
Your address section seems fines. I would not prefer any changes.
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
Yes. Having past experience of being a teacher and a librarian clearly indicates the resume supports the objective as they show qualities like public relation and leadership,
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
I think it’s a little short. You could add more points towards your skills Or can elaborate more on your education aspect.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
I think you have done a perfect job for this one.
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
Most of the bullets start with action verbs some have them missing. I am sure you can do better at that.
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
I think most of the things are perfect. I would like you to elaborate a little more on your skills and achievements.
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
The resume seems to pass all the tests, just make the resume little longer and the font used a bit smaller.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
I think you overall have done a good job but according to me I have told you about what changes you can bring about. Hope the suggestions help.
RE: Soo Yun's Resume
Before I start I just want to let you know I'm in a pretty technical field and am expected to constantly critique peer work, so please do not take anything I say too hard or too personally. Now, that that's out of the way; your resume has a good format to it, but there are a few things that would make it even better in my opinion (strictly formatting wise).
Under work experience your company names/location do not line up, "Omnuri" is farther left than "Children's", these are both also out of line with "New Orleans" in the Volunteer section. It will help the eyes scan and make it look more professional if you could get these to line up with each other, if you're having trouble like I usually do when trying to format too much in word, you may want to try a one row table for each of those lines as long as you can keep everything else in line. Also, your second bullet under work experience is out of line when it word wraps, the second line of that bullet is left of the line above it. It would look better if they were lined up with each other or even if the line under it was slightly indented. I actually believe that is the way the resume in the reading from week one was formatted, so that if your line word wrapped, the preceding lines would be slightly indented. One final note for alignment before I stop myself, all the dates on the right side of the page are not aligned, I would get them so that they all start from the same spot on the page from the left. That way they look flush and more professional.
Enough of formatting for now, I'm not an English major so I know I'm only so good at helping with proper formatting, punctuation, etc. On to other things that I think would help you out a bit. In your work experience section, I believe you mean "Librarian Assistant" not "Liberian" Also, your first two bullet points under this position start with different tenses "Helping" and "Read" I would change the first bullet to "Helped children find and return books to the shelves." But again, this may be partially personal preference but I do think you need to keep the tense the same throughout. It's something I mess up on a lot, so I know it can be pretty hard to do when you're writing. Your Volunteer Experience section is a perfect example of maintaining the same tense and looks and reads well because of it.
Moving on to the Skills section, I like the way you listed your skills but for some reason my eyes keep blurring the "Foreign Language" in with the "Computer". I'm not sure if it is because the Computer skills line is so long it makes it look like the Foreign Language line is word wrapped or what, but they blur together when I read it. It could just be my eyes though, but if you made "Computer" and "Foreign Language" bold, it makes it easier to read. Again I think this just helps read the resume faster and it could be just me.
Finally the dates in your activities section are future dates. You have Fall 2007 listed and that hasn't come yet this year. I'm pretty sure you meant 2006.
Overall it's a pretty good resume, I know it seems like I picked out a ton of problems but it really isn't that bad. I'm pretty picky, but I like to think employers are too. You did a good job, and just a few tweaks here and there and you'll have a great resume.
**edit: I removed a comment I made about the bullets
Resume Reply
1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
Your objective states that you want an internship in the marketing area. If you want to make it more specific, you could narrow it down. For example, you could say a sports marketing internship or whatever area the opening involves.
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
The layout is nice. You are consistent with headings. The only part that runs together is under work experience. Your heading and job title are both bold. Maybe try italics or shading to help distinguish.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
The resume does fit within a page. It does look a little stretched out due to your spacing. You could single space it and give more details on how your previous experience would help with this position. It sounds like you were very involved at your jobs; maybe mention if you had to do anything in groups, etc.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
Like I said before it is very consistent. The only suggestion I had was under work experience.
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
Your resume does a good job being consistent with headings. The indentations bring focus to each section.
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
The important sections are bolded. My suggestion is to put your skills under your education since you probably acquired some, such as computer skills, in school.
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
The content supports for the most part. Your mention of teamwork under volunteer experience is good. You might want to put some similar descriptions under your work experience. If possible try to link past experience with what the internship desires.
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
The resume is a decent length. You could possibly elaborate your past experiences.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
The material is in a good order except the skills as I mentioned before.
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
Not all the items begin with action verbs, such as your work experience. Also, try to make sure they are in the same tense (i.e. helped and read, not helping and read).
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
The resume gives good details.
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
The resume evenly distributes information. The font size is easy to read. The only thing I have found is at the bottom under activities and honors the dates of involvement are not aligned. Maybe try columns to help organize.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
The resume is good overall. Maybe add a little more description. The layout is nice.
feedback
1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
I think the information satisfies the jobs requirements.
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
yes.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
yes.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
yes
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
I think that the school's name and the degree should be bold because they are one of the most important information on the resume. The degree establishes a link between the job applied for and your background.
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
The job title in the experience section is provided, but I think that the company name should be put in the next line so as to be aligned with the left margin. As i read the articles posted on the instructor blog i figured out that the company name matters a lot to the employer and itll be easier for him to find it while scanning.
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
Yes. the leadership thing is portrayed by 1. "Teaching Korean to foreign workers who have difficulties in speaking and reading Korean." 2. "Responsible for preparing teaching materials and checking daily homework."
Also the minor in communications helps develop the qualities for public relations.
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
no. Its perfectly alright.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
yes.
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
yes, they all do.
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
It will be great if you could put something in the job tasks which would directly suggest the qualities required for public relations and leadership.
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
yes the resume passed all the tests.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
You forgot to provide the present and the permanent address. Very important for the employer for correspondence.