1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
I think it was a good idea to put in your resume the volunteer experience you had, since this connects to the objectives you want to achieve.
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
The design looks really well, only thing I would change is not to put the subtitles in bold since it could be a little bothering for some people. Your name looks well in bold though.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
The resume does fit comfortably within the page, but probably you could increase the font size just a little bit so the resume does not appear to be small at first sight.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
The resume is well structured; easy to follow and easy to read. As mentioned before, I would make the font size just a little bigger (it appears that some parts of the resume has smaller font than others).
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
The line dividing the header and body is very well placed; the design does attract attention to the reader. But adding bold, subtitle, and capital letters to the subtitles make the resume seem “too much” (not in a bad way).
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
On the top left side, you could structure better your address instead of typing it on a straight line. You could divide the address, city, and postal codes on separate lines. This will also help your resume look more professional and make it fit better within the page.
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
Yes. The volunteer activities and the work experience (when you mention that you have recommendations to improve productivity of the employee’s department) support the objective.
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
As mentioned before, it is a little bit short. You could probably elaborate a little bit more your education, and think about some skills or responsibilities that could highlight you against the competition.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
Yes, the headlines are ordered in sequence of importance. I think you did really well in ordering the material.
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
The list items are ordered in terms of importance, but there are some that do not begin with action verbs. For example, instead of “recommendations to…” you could put “gave recommendations to...”
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
You could probably elaborate your work experience a little bit more, since they seem a little bit to general. For example, you could be more specific about the data you analyzed in the division.
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
The resume seems to pass all the tests, except that you could make it a little bit longer to fit the page in order to attract more attention at first sight.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
I don’t think that there is anything else; I already mentioned all the points that could use some improvement. Overall, you did a good job.
1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
- He could tie his objective into his experience information, activities, and volunteer sections of the resume by elaborating why they are
all relevant.
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
- The layout is easy to follow. I would suggest using a different font for the heading text.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve
it?
- The resume seemed to be a little to short. With more contexts he could have made it appear longer and more in depth. I might
suggest using bulleted points.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
- Like indicated earlier, I would have used a more traditional font for your section headers. It is easy to read however.
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
- He used bold, italics, and underlining properly. It enhanced the readability quality of the resume.
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
- Yes, the information is properly place with good alignment. One suggestion I would make is to demote the "Summer intern" line.
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
- As I said earlier, provide bulleted points to tie the sections back to the objective.
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
- Resume should probably be about a page in length minimum. I would say since you chose to include an activities section, you could
probably put a little more to it, but not so much that it is overwhelming.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
- I think that the "skills" sections should come before the "volunteer" section
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
- Actions seemed to be placed where they needed to be placed and order is sufficient
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
- He used words that were advised to be used to show greater emphasis, like "analyzing" for example.
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
- Space is consistent for the most part, however there seems to be an extra space between work experience and volunteer experience.
Also, the right column should be aligned straighter. Your email address should be in alignment with the work tenure for your internship.
You should put a break within the lines of the left aligned text to make it appear as if there is more of a prominent right column.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
- Make sure you capitalize your street address in the header of your resume.
1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
I think that you should put the University name and the degree in bold letters. The university name carries a lot of importance.
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
The design is pleasuring to the eye but you can make the headings bold or Underlined rather than both. This would really help because when One scans through I could just see the headings and the content seemed very small in frot of it.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
The length of the resume is rather small. What you can do is, elaborate some more responsibilities in the work experience or can even put the tasks that you undertook while volunteering for the social organization.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
I think it is easily readable and one can scan through it in no time.
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
I think that you should really put the school name in bold letters.
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
You can put "citibank Singapore" in the next line and make summer intern bold. This would help you to consume more vertical space on the page and when somebody wants to scan it he can see citibank easily for it will be on the left margin.
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
the resume is a bit short. You can put the Citibank in the next line firstly and then you can also put MS word, powerpoint, excel and frontpage all in different lines.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
yes, the material is sequenced in order of importance and relevance.
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
yes
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
yes
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
The resume is a bit short.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
The resume is a bit short. Just needs a bit of formatting.
Comments
Resume Feedback
1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
I think it was a good idea to put in your resume the volunteer experience you had, since this connects to the objectives you want to achieve.
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
The design looks really well, only thing I would change is not to put the subtitles in bold since it could be a little bothering for some people. Your name looks well in bold though.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
The resume does fit comfortably within the page, but probably you could increase the font size just a little bit so the resume does not appear to be small at first sight.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
The resume is well structured; easy to follow and easy to read. As mentioned before, I would make the font size just a little bigger (it appears that some parts of the resume has smaller font than others).
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
The line dividing the header and body is very well placed; the design does attract attention to the reader. But adding bold, subtitle, and capital letters to the subtitles make the resume seem “too much” (not in a bad way).
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
On the top left side, you could structure better your address instead of typing it on a straight line. You could divide the address, city, and postal codes on separate lines. This will also help your resume look more professional and make it fit better within the page.
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
Yes. The volunteer activities and the work experience (when you mention that you have recommendations to improve productivity of the employee’s department) support the objective.
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
As mentioned before, it is a little bit short. You could probably elaborate a little bit more your education, and think about some skills or responsibilities that could highlight you against the competition.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
Yes, the headlines are ordered in sequence of importance. I think you did really well in ordering the material.
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
The list items are ordered in terms of importance, but there are some that do not begin with action verbs. For example, instead of “recommendations to…” you could put “gave recommendations to...”
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
You could probably elaborate your work experience a little bit more, since they seem a little bit to general. For example, you could be more specific about the data you analyzed in the division.
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
The resume seems to pass all the tests, except that you could make it a little bit longer to fit the page in order to attract more attention at first sight.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
I don’t think that there is anything else; I already mentioned all the points that could use some improvement. Overall, you did a good job.
Peer Resume Review
1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
- He could tie his objective into his experience information, activities, and volunteer sections of the resume by elaborating why they are
all relevant.
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
- The layout is easy to follow. I would suggest using a different font for the heading text.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve
it?
- The resume seemed to be a little to short. With more contexts he could have made it appear longer and more in depth. I might
suggest using bulleted points.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
- Like indicated earlier, I would have used a more traditional font for your section headers. It is easy to read however.
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
- He used bold, italics, and underlining properly. It enhanced the readability quality of the resume.
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
- Yes, the information is properly place with good alignment. One suggestion I would make is to demote the "Summer intern" line.
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
- As I said earlier, provide bulleted points to tie the sections back to the objective.
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
- Resume should probably be about a page in length minimum. I would say since you chose to include an activities section, you could
probably put a little more to it, but not so much that it is overwhelming.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
- I think that the "skills" sections should come before the "volunteer" section
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
- Actions seemed to be placed where they needed to be placed and order is sufficient
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
- He used words that were advised to be used to show greater emphasis, like "analyzing" for example.
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
- Space is consistent for the most part, however there seems to be an extra space between work experience and volunteer experience.
Also, the right column should be aligned straighter. Your email address should be in alignment with the work tenure for your internship.
You should put a break within the lines of the left aligned text to make it appear as if there is more of a prominent right column.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
- Make sure you capitalize your street address in the header of your resume.
Improvement
1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
I think that you should put the University name and the degree in bold letters. The university name carries a lot of importance.
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
The design is pleasuring to the eye but you can make the headings bold or Underlined rather than both. This would really help because when One scans through I could just see the headings and the content seemed very small in frot of it.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
The length of the resume is rather small. What you can do is, elaborate some more responsibilities in the work experience or can even put the tasks that you undertook while volunteering for the social organization.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
I think it is easily readable and one can scan through it in no time.
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
I think that you should really put the school name in bold letters.
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible? Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
You can put "citibank Singapore" in the next line and make summer intern bold. This would help you to consume more vertical space on the page and when somebody wants to scan it he can see citibank easily for it will be on the left margin.
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
the resume is a bit short. You can put the Citibank in the next line firstly and then you can also put MS word, powerpoint, excel and frontpage all in different lines.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
yes, the material is sequenced in order of importance and relevance.
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
yes
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
yes
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
The resume is a bit short.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
The resume is a bit short. Just needs a bit of formatting.