Resume Rough Draft
For some reason I can't figure out how to attach my resume so I just copied it below. Sorry for the inconvience, any helpfull comments are welcome. I do have some bold words and stuff but they didn't show up since I had to copy it.
Cory Mlinac
Home Address: School Address:
33139 Shannon Dr. 235 Littleton St. Apt. 2
Wildwood IL, 60030 West Lafayette, IN 47906
(847) 816-0458 (847) 361-4261
cmlinac@purdue.edu
Career Objective: To engage customers and provide guidance as a full time financial representative at Fidelity Investments.
Education: Purdue University: Expected graduation, May 2008
Bachelor of Arts in Financial Counseling and Planning
Related Courses Completed:
• Personal Finance
• Business Law • Financial Management
• Interpersonal Communication
Work Experience: Tennis Camp Instructor : Gurnee, IL
o Helped the beginner players learn the fundamental skills and strategy of the game.
o Was responsible for safety of campers and creating a safe and fun environment. June – July (2004-2006)
Para Planning Internship : Libertyville, IL
Assisted financial advisors in daily activities which included:
Calling Clients
Updating new client info software. May – August (2007)
Comments
Peer Edit of Resume
1. I think this is a good start, but I think it needs more information in the area of finance.
2. As you already mentioned it is not attached properly. In order to attach I think there is usually a part at that bottom to click. I haven't attached my resume yet so I am not for sure. I am sure you will figure it out, if not just email one of the instructors.
3. Since there is not that much information, I think the resume will fit onto the page.
4. It is easily readable, all the fonts appear to be the same.
5. He mentioned above that he bolds in some areas. This be seen when he attaches it in Word.
6. The most important facts are noted at the top and to the left. The meat of his information is lined up nicely and orderly as well.
7. I really think you could explain more into how will you engage the customers. I think you could touch on the guidance area too. This could help the person reading your resume know your strengths and get an understanding of them.
8. Most of the resume looks fine. I might would add something job responsibilities and elaborate on the skill area.
9. Yes the material is in sequence from importance to relevance.
10. There are no bulleted items to comment on.
11. The resume is not general, but I think you could use more words pertaining to the business profession a little more.
12. For now I say no, I think there could be more information added. Maybe elaborate on some things. After the next revision she should pass the test with flying colors.
13. None as of right now.