Questions for Response
1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
If there is a specific job you want or a category of jobs you would consider, you may want to mention it in your objective so the HR people can narrow your focus.
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
It is well organized with a good use of visual space. The only thing I would suggest is to move your experience slightly to the left to chop up the white space.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
It is fine, however, you may want to put your last two categories into complete sentences to take up more space to the right.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
Perfect
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
Perhaps, bold the italicized words for added interest.
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible?
Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
Yes
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
The content of the resume shows experience in finance; however, from the objective I am not certain whether you want to continue to work in that field.
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
No, the length is fine.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
Yes
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
I would change "tried to sell..." to "sold..." because that makes you sound more successful. Other than that minor fix, I think you did well.
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
With the exception of the objective, I would say yes.
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
The columns should be aligned.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
Your international background is a great plus; the fact that you are bilingual makes you stand out. The only last suggestion, as I look at your resume, is that your education section is unclear. I am unsure of whether you are pursuing a bachelors or masters degree at Purdue and whether you graduated from your other university.
1. First I think you should focus more on banking. Maybe by adding your skills that would enable you to benefit the bank.
2. I think the layout is fine. The bullets and format are appealing to the eye, they appear very professional.
3. The resume does fit nicely upon the page.
4. It is easily readable, all the important names of places were identified by italics.
5. He uses a header at the top which helps with the separation of information. Boldings and italics are used throughout the resume and I believed they were placed in the resume properly.
6. Everything is located on the top and to the left. I think I would place the skills before the language.
7. The objective I think should at least say the job or explain the type of position you are seeking.
8. The length is okay. I certainly think you can elaborate you skills for example maybe tell how long you have been speaking those languages. You also need to note if your fluent or not.
9. The sequence of the resume is in correct order.
10. Yes the bulleted items start with action verbs. They are in order of importance, they are describing his work experience.
11. You do a good job being professional throughout the resume. The only place I thought was too general was the Language section.
12. He could make improvements by adding on to the skills and language section.
13. Nothing more to add at this time, overall it was written well.
Comments
Peer-editing of Resume
Questions for Response
1. What can the writer do to make the resume better tailored to the specific job being applied for?
If there is a specific job you want or a category of jobs you would consider, you may want to mention it in your objective so the HR people can narrow your focus.
2. Is the layout and design pleasing to the eye? Make at least one suggestion for improving it.
It is well organized with a good use of visual space. The only thing I would suggest is to move your experience slightly to the left to chop up the white space.
3. Does the resume fit comfortably within the page (as opposed to being squished in or stretched out)? What can the writer do to improve it?
It is fine, however, you may want to put your last two categories into complete sentences to take up more space to the right.
4. Is it easily readable (no confusing fonts, clearly marked sections)? What improvements can be made?
Perfect
5. Does it use typography (including headers and bold and italics) appropriately and effectively?
Perhaps, bold the italicized words for added interest.
6. Is the most important information located on the left side of the page and near the top whenever possible?
Identify at least one part that could be better placed.
Yes
7. Does the content of the resume support the objective (if there is one)? Explain.
The content of the resume shows experience in finance; however, from the objective I am not certain whether you want to continue to work in that field.
8. Is the resume too short? Where can it elaborate? Job skills? Responsibilities? Education?
No, the length is fine.
9. Is material sequenced in order of importance and relevance?
Yes
10. Do bulleted items begin with action verbs? Are list items ordered in terms of importance?
I would change "tried to sell..." to "sold..." because that makes you sound more successful. Other than that minor fix, I think you did well.
11. Does the resume avoid generalities and focus on specific information and professional terminology?
With the exception of the objective, I would say yes.
12. Does the resume pass the Quadrant, Column, Squint, and Distance tests? Explain how the author might make improvements based on your test results.
The columns should be aligned.
13. What other observations can you make about the resume?
Your international background is a great plus; the fact that you are bilingual makes you stand out. The only last suggestion, as I look at your resume, is that your education section is unclear. I am unsure of whether you are pursuing a bachelors or masters degree at Purdue and whether you graduated from your other university.
Resume Peer Edit
1. First I think you should focus more on banking. Maybe by adding your skills that would enable you to benefit the bank.
2. I think the layout is fine. The bullets and format are appealing to the eye, they appear very professional.
3. The resume does fit nicely upon the page.
4. It is easily readable, all the important names of places were identified by italics.
5. He uses a header at the top which helps with the separation of information. Boldings and italics are used throughout the resume and I believed they were placed in the resume properly.
6. Everything is located on the top and to the left. I think I would place the skills before the language.
7. The objective I think should at least say the job or explain the type of position you are seeking.
8. The length is okay. I certainly think you can elaborate you skills for example maybe tell how long you have been speaking those languages. You also need to note if your fluent or not.
9. The sequence of the resume is in correct order.
10. Yes the bulleted items start with action verbs. They are in order of importance, they are describing his work experience.
11. You do a good job being professional throughout the resume. The only place I thought was too general was the Language section.
12. He could make improvements by adding on to the skills and language section.
13. Nothing more to add at this time, overall it was written well.