Form and Style
1. Yes your cover letter has all of the necessary components that should be in a cover letter.
2. Yes all of the text is in block format, aligned with the left margin.
3. I think it mostly fits the situation but it may be a little too formal in some places. I would say a little more about what you like to do other than accounting. Then they can get a better sense of your personality and what you enjoy other than accounting.
4. Yes, your cover letter seems to be in the right tone. You don't brag too much about yourself or the company yet you showcase your enthusiasm for accounting and you give some praise to the company without overdoing it.
5. I'm not positive but I don't think you need a subject line there. Other than that I did not notice any mechanical or spelling errors.
Content/Rhetorical Context
1. I think you can but some more of you qualifications in your cover letter. You mention that you have a love for accounting and numbers but you should tell them why you are qualified for the job.
2. Yes, he stated that he was very enthusiastic about not only accounting, but anything that involves numbers. He also mentions what he's learned from working in groups before and talks about in the companies advertisement mentions you would need to work in groups so that is good information to have in there.
3. As far as I can tell there are no very specific technical terms used that professional accounts would know. I think anyone reading it not only accountants could easily understand the cover letter.
4. It identifies the position applied for, the source of it, but not why the reader is well suited for it. Their qualifications are seen in the second and third paragraphs more than the first one.
5. It doesn't say how the reader can be contacted in the future. I think it does end on a high note because he does a good job of complimenting the company and encouraging a response from the company.
6. I think you should put in a little more reasons for why you are qualified for the position and a little bit more on what interests you other than accounting. Other than that I think you have a good cover letter and with a few revisions I think it will easily become a great one.
Comments
Cover Letter Peer Editing
Form and Style
1. Yes your cover letter has all of the necessary components that should be in a cover letter.
2. Yes all of the text is in block format, aligned with the left margin.
3. I think it mostly fits the situation but it may be a little too formal in some places. I would say a little more about what you like to do other than accounting. Then they can get a better sense of your personality and what you enjoy other than accounting.
4. Yes, your cover letter seems to be in the right tone. You don't brag too much about yourself or the company yet you showcase your enthusiasm for accounting and you give some praise to the company without overdoing it.
5. I'm not positive but I don't think you need a subject line there. Other than that I did not notice any mechanical or spelling errors.
Content/Rhetorical Context
1. I think you can but some more of you qualifications in your cover letter. You mention that you have a love for accounting and numbers but you should tell them why you are qualified for the job.
2. Yes, he stated that he was very enthusiastic about not only accounting, but anything that involves numbers. He also mentions what he's learned from working in groups before and talks about in the companies advertisement mentions you would need to work in groups so that is good information to have in there.
3. As far as I can tell there are no very specific technical terms used that professional accounts would know. I think anyone reading it not only accountants could easily understand the cover letter.
4. It identifies the position applied for, the source of it, but not why the reader is well suited for it. Their qualifications are seen in the second and third paragraphs more than the first one.
5. It doesn't say how the reader can be contacted in the future. I think it does end on a high note because he does a good job of complimenting the company and encouraging a response from the company.
6. I think you should put in a little more reasons for why you are qualified for the position and a little bit more on what interests you other than accounting. Other than that I think you have a good cover letter and with a few revisions I think it will easily become a great one.