1. Does the letter include all the necessary components (return address, header, salutation, introductory paragraph, body paragraph(s), and conclusion)? If not, what’s missing?
Yes, you have the heading, greeting, opening, persuasion, and closing.
2. Does the writer use block format (all text flush with the left margin)?
Yes, your format looks good.
3. Does the style of the letter suit the occasion? Is it too informal? Too formal or generic? Explain.
I think this letter suits the occasion very well. I don’t think it’s generic at all. You included good examples of what you’re capable of.
4. Does the writer take the right tone? (E.g., come off as enthusiastic without gushing? highly qualified without bragging?) Explain.
I think you hit the tone just right. You explain your skills in a very professional manner.
5. Are there any spelling or mechanical errors? If so, identify them, either by listing them here or by circling them on a printed draft.
I have enclosed my resume “in” application for this position…. Did you mean “and” here?
Content/Rhetorical Context
1. Does the letter speak directly and specifically to the job ad, using keywords to organize the
discussion of his or her qualifications? Even if it does, what could be done better?
I think you do a great job of saying your specific skills (treating, anesthetizing, and discharging patients). I would maybe explain how you learned these activities.
2. Does the writer mention specific reasons why he or she has applied for the position? Explain.
Yes. You explained your future career goals and how this job in involved with your plans.
3. Does the writer identify specific skills, using terminology that other experienced people would recognize?
Yes. As stated about you really point out your skills well and use good terminology.
4. Does the introductory paragraph identify the position applied for, its source, and then the major reason(s) why the writer is well-suited?
I think you got this paragraph very well-suited for the job.
5. Does the conclusion say how the writer can be contacted for further discussion or an interview? Does the letter end on a high note? Explain.
I think the conclusion is very good. You give you information and you thank them for their time.
6. What is the most important revision the writer should make? Explain.
I think you did a great job. I would possibly adjust the mechanical error and add a couple examples of where you got these skills. Again great job.
Form and Style
1. Yes, your resume has all of the components that need to be in correct cover letter.
2. Yes, there the text is in block format throughout the entire cover letter.
3. I think the style of the cover letter is perfect. It is not too formal, yet it sustains a professional writing style throughout.
4. Yes, the writer has done a good job of showing enthusiasm for the desired position without coming off as bragging or being too good for the position. The writer also shows enthusiasm for the job and gives good detail of previous jobs where she learned valuable experience.
5. I did not notice any spelling or mechanical errors other than spell check saying Yahoo Hot Jobs should be two words instead of one but I'm not sure how it is written on Yahoo.com, so I would research that to make sure it actually is one word.
Content/Rhetorical Context
1. Yes, the writer has shown plenty of examples of why she is qualified for the position and shows some previous experience she has gained in past jobs. I think you've done a great job in this section and I'm not really sure how to improve on it.
2. Yes, the writer has mentioned some specific reasons on why she has chosen this job. She mentioned she wanted to work as a veterinary technician after college. She also said it would be a good company for her right out of school to get her some more real world experience.
3. She mentioned how she worked in the veterinary field as a Horse Care Coordinator and I'm assuming that means she worked with horses in some aspect, specifically geriatric horses and volunteer riders, and some experienced veterinarian technicians might have known that without having to read the next sentence like I had to.
4. Yes, the introductory paragraph mentions the position applied for, the source of the job and some of the major reasons the reader is well suited for this job.
5. Yes, she has written down her telephone number and her email address to be contacted in the future. She also does a good job of thanking them and making sure they consider her in their search for a prospective employee.
6. I think the most important revision the reader can make will be to write some interests of hers other than animals or working as a veterinary technician. Overall though I would say this is a great cover letter and assuming the resume attached is a well written you seem like a well qualified applicant.
Form and Style
1. Yes it includes all of the necessary components
2. Yes the writer does use block formatting so it is all flush with the left margin
3. I think that the letter comes off very well. It is not to generic or to specific and it is very professional so it is not to informal.
4. I think that maybe the writer could show a little more enthusiasm for the job. She shows interest but not much enthusiasm.
5. I could not locate any misspelling errors on the draft
Content
1. Yes the letter speaks directly to the job, referencing it specifically. It also uses specific words to identify her qualifications for the job.
2. The letter does not go into depth into why the writer chose this specific job. I think that is one are that she could improve on.
3. I think that the writer identifies specific skills that would make her qualified for the position. I also believe that her terminology is such that experienced professionals would understand it.
4. Yes the opening paragraph does include the position, its source, and the major reason that the writer is applying
5. Yes
6. I think overall this is a wonderful cover letter. The only thing I might change is to provide examples of the traits that she talks about in the final paragraph.
Comments
Comment - Good Job
Form and Style
1. Does the letter include all the necessary components (return address, header, salutation, introductory paragraph, body paragraph(s), and conclusion)? If not, what’s missing?
Yes, you have the heading, greeting, opening, persuasion, and closing.
2. Does the writer use block format (all text flush with the left margin)?
Yes, your format looks good.
3. Does the style of the letter suit the occasion? Is it too informal? Too formal or generic? Explain.
I think this letter suits the occasion very well. I don’t think it’s generic at all. You included good examples of what you’re capable of.
4. Does the writer take the right tone? (E.g., come off as enthusiastic without gushing? highly qualified without bragging?) Explain.
I think you hit the tone just right. You explain your skills in a very professional manner.
5. Are there any spelling or mechanical errors? If so, identify them, either by listing them here or by circling them on a printed draft.
I have enclosed my resume “in” application for this position…. Did you mean “and” here?
Content/Rhetorical Context
1. Does the letter speak directly and specifically to the job ad, using keywords to organize the
discussion of his or her qualifications? Even if it does, what could be done better?
I think you do a great job of saying your specific skills (treating, anesthetizing, and discharging patients). I would maybe explain how you learned these activities.
2. Does the writer mention specific reasons why he or she has applied for the position? Explain.
Yes. You explained your future career goals and how this job in involved with your plans.
3. Does the writer identify specific skills, using terminology that other experienced people would recognize?
Yes. As stated about you really point out your skills well and use good terminology.
4. Does the introductory paragraph identify the position applied for, its source, and then the major reason(s) why the writer is well-suited?
I think you got this paragraph very well-suited for the job.
5. Does the conclusion say how the writer can be contacted for further discussion or an interview? Does the letter end on a high note? Explain.
I think the conclusion is very good. You give you information and you thank them for their time.
6. What is the most important revision the writer should make? Explain.
I think you did a great job. I would possibly adjust the mechanical error and add a couple examples of where you got these skills. Again great job.
Cover Letter Peer Editing
Form and Style
1. Yes, your resume has all of the components that need to be in correct cover letter.
2. Yes, there the text is in block format throughout the entire cover letter.
3. I think the style of the cover letter is perfect. It is not too formal, yet it sustains a professional writing style throughout.
4. Yes, the writer has done a good job of showing enthusiasm for the desired position without coming off as bragging or being too good for the position. The writer also shows enthusiasm for the job and gives good detail of previous jobs where she learned valuable experience.
5. I did not notice any spelling or mechanical errors other than spell check saying Yahoo Hot Jobs should be two words instead of one but I'm not sure how it is written on Yahoo.com, so I would research that to make sure it actually is one word.
Content/Rhetorical Context
1. Yes, the writer has shown plenty of examples of why she is qualified for the position and shows some previous experience she has gained in past jobs. I think you've done a great job in this section and I'm not really sure how to improve on it.
2. Yes, the writer has mentioned some specific reasons on why she has chosen this job. She mentioned she wanted to work as a veterinary technician after college. She also said it would be a good company for her right out of school to get her some more real world experience.
3. She mentioned how she worked in the veterinary field as a Horse Care Coordinator and I'm assuming that means she worked with horses in some aspect, specifically geriatric horses and volunteer riders, and some experienced veterinarian technicians might have known that without having to read the next sentence like I had to.
4. Yes, the introductory paragraph mentions the position applied for, the source of the job and some of the major reasons the reader is well suited for this job.
5. Yes, she has written down her telephone number and her email address to be contacted in the future. She also does a good job of thanking them and making sure they consider her in their search for a prospective employee.
6. I think the most important revision the reader can make will be to write some interests of hers other than animals or working as a veterinary technician. Overall though I would say this is a great cover letter and assuming the resume attached is a well written you seem like a well qualified applicant.
response
Form and Style
1. Yes it includes all of the necessary components
2. Yes the writer does use block formatting so it is all flush with the left margin
3. I think that the letter comes off very well. It is not to generic or to specific and it is very professional so it is not to informal.
4. I think that maybe the writer could show a little more enthusiasm for the job. She shows interest but not much enthusiasm.
5. I could not locate any misspelling errors on the draft
Content
1. Yes the letter speaks directly to the job, referencing it specifically. It also uses specific words to identify her qualifications for the job.
2. The letter does not go into depth into why the writer chose this specific job. I think that is one are that she could improve on.
3. I think that the writer identifies specific skills that would make her qualified for the position. I also believe that her terminology is such that experienced professionals would understand it.
4. Yes the opening paragraph does include the position, its source, and the major reason that the writer is applying
5. Yes
6. I think overall this is a wonderful cover letter. The only thing I might change is to provide examples of the traits that she talks about in the final paragraph.