I thought you did a good job with the form and style, it seems slightly generic but after reading so many of these, they all start to sound the same so it's probably nothing big.
As for the rhetoric part:
1. Does the letter speak directly and specifically to the job ad, using keywords to organize the discussion of his or her qualifications? Even if it does, what could be done better?
Yes. The job ad wasn’t overly specific to the qualifications, but just specified what types of majors it was seeking. I believe you did a good job picking out a few of the key words and incorporating them into your letter.
2. Does the writer mention specific reasons why he or she has applied for the position? Explain.
I thought this was a little vauge. You mentioned it in your first paragraph to “broaden my education and professional experience” but I would try and come up with something a little more specific as to why you want the job so it shows you are really interested in obtaining it.
3. Does the writer identify specific skills, using terminology that other experienced people would recognize?
Yes, when you referred to the tasks in your old job.
4. Does the introductory paragraph identify the position applied for, its source, and then the major reason(s) why the writer is well-suited?
Yes, this was done very well.
5. Does the conclusion say how the writer can be contacted for further discussion or an interview?
Does the letter end on a high note? Explain.
Yes, you did a good job talking about how you would be an excellent choice and a good benefit to the company and listing your contact info.
6. What is the most important revision the writer should make? Explain.
I would try and add one or two specific examples of your skills from your previous job if you can, and I would try and be a little more specific about why you want the job as long as it doesn’t come off too selfish.
I think you're letter was good, it was formal and carried the correct tone for the position you are applying for.
Form and Style
1) Yes, it looks great!
2)Yes
3)Yes. It sounds very professional and impressive.
4)No, Its perfect.
Content/Rhetorical Context
1)Yes
2) Yes, you talked about your past experiences and your skills very well. It shows very clearly why you want the job.
3) Yes
4)Yes
5)Yes. It sounds like you are really exited.
6)It looks great as is.
Comments
RE: Cover Letter (RachB487)
I thought you did a good job with the form and style, it seems slightly generic but after reading so many of these, they all start to sound the same so it's probably nothing big.
As for the rhetoric part:
1. Does the letter speak directly and specifically to the job ad, using keywords to organize the discussion of his or her qualifications? Even if it does, what could be done better?
Yes. The job ad wasn’t overly specific to the qualifications, but just specified what types of majors it was seeking. I believe you did a good job picking out a few of the key words and incorporating them into your letter.
2. Does the writer mention specific reasons why he or she has applied for the position? Explain.
I thought this was a little vauge. You mentioned it in your first paragraph to “broaden my education and professional experience” but I would try and come up with something a little more specific as to why you want the job so it shows you are really interested in obtaining it.
3. Does the writer identify specific skills, using terminology that other experienced people would recognize?
Yes, when you referred to the tasks in your old job.
4. Does the introductory paragraph identify the position applied for, its source, and then the major reason(s) why the writer is well-suited?
Yes, this was done very well.
5. Does the conclusion say how the writer can be contacted for further discussion or an interview?
Does the letter end on a high note? Explain.
Yes, you did a good job talking about how you would be an excellent choice and a good benefit to the company and listing your contact info.
6. What is the most important revision the writer should make? Explain.
I would try and add one or two specific examples of your skills from your previous job if you can, and I would try and be a little more specific about why you want the job as long as it doesn’t come off too selfish.
I think you're letter was good, it was formal and carried the correct tone for the position you are applying for.
cover letter peer edit
Form and Style
1) Yes, it looks great!
2)Yes
3)Yes. It sounds very professional and impressive.
4)No, Its perfect.
Content/Rhetorical Context
1)Yes
2) Yes, you talked about your past experiences and your skills very well. It shows very clearly why you want the job.
3) Yes
4)Yes
5)Yes. It sounds like you are really exited.
6)It looks great as is.