Form and Style:
1. Everything appears to be there!
2. Yes, you used block format.
3. The style seems just right. It’s a good balance, not too formal and not too informal.
4. The tone was very enthusiastic, but not to the point of gushing. The way you listed your qualifications made you appear more confident than anything else, which is always a good thing.
5. I didn’t catch any spelling or mechanical errors.
Content/Rhetorical Context:
1. You seemed to be speaking to the ad using keywords, as well as, using information you found in researching the company.
2. You said that you were “a team player with an enthusiastic spirit to be a member of a well-established family-run company,” but you didn’t really mention why you want to be a part of the company.
3. Yes, you identified specific skills you gained from your previous work experience.
4. The introduction covers the position, source, and major reasons you are qualified.
5. Your conclusion included all of the proper parts, including contact information, and ended very politely.
6. The only suggestion I have would be to add in the introduction the specific reasons why you are applying for the position. Other than that, it looks great!
Form and Style
1. Yes
2. Yes. Everything is alligned to the left
3. I think the style of this letter is very balanced
4. The tone seems to be very enthusiastic but I think you should bring down the details of your experiences a knotch.
5. I cant seem to find any. As a suggestion, it might be good idead to align the blocks as that looks a little nicer.
Content/Rhetorical Context
1. The keywords are well used.
2. I think you can relate from your experiences why you want to be a part of this industry. I think it needs to be a bit more clear.
3. Yes.
4. Yes. Maybe a little too generic but gets the work done.
5. Contact information has been provided and the letter does end on a high note
6. Why you want to be a part of this organization should be a little more clear and I would suggest that you should work around
with wordings a little. Just seems a little off in the middle. Overall, a good piece of writing
Comments
Cover Letter Editing
Form and Style:
1. Everything appears to be there!
2. Yes, you used block format.
3. The style seems just right. It’s a good balance, not too formal and not too informal.
4. The tone was very enthusiastic, but not to the point of gushing. The way you listed your qualifications made you appear more confident than anything else, which is always a good thing.
5. I didn’t catch any spelling or mechanical errors.
Content/Rhetorical Context:
1. You seemed to be speaking to the ad using keywords, as well as, using information you found in researching the company.
2. You said that you were “a team player with an enthusiastic spirit to be a member of a well-established family-run company,” but you didn’t really mention why you want to be a part of the company.
3. Yes, you identified specific skills you gained from your previous work experience.
4. The introduction covers the position, source, and major reasons you are qualified.
5. Your conclusion included all of the proper parts, including contact information, and ended very politely.
6. The only suggestion I have would be to add in the introduction the specific reasons why you are applying for the position. Other than that, it looks great!
Cover Letter Editing
Form and Style
1. Yes
2. Yes. Everything is alligned to the left
3. I think the style of this letter is very balanced
4. The tone seems to be very enthusiastic but I think you should bring down the details of your experiences a knotch.
5. I cant seem to find any. As a suggestion, it might be good idead to align the blocks as that looks a little nicer.
Content/Rhetorical Context
1. The keywords are well used.
2. I think you can relate from your experiences why you want to be a part of this industry. I think it needs to be a bit more clear.
3. Yes.
4. Yes. Maybe a little too generic but gets the work done.
5. Contact information has been provided and the letter does end on a high note
6. Why you want to be a part of this organization should be a little more clear and I would suggest that you should work around
with wordings a little. Just seems a little off in the middle. Overall, a good piece of writing