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JetBlue Press Release

Mon, 07/02/2007 - 00:18 — kim264

Here's my press release draft. I appreciate any comments and advices to improve it!

Comments

Mon, 07/02/2007 - 07:17 — stejani

peer edit

I think you did a good job with you press release. It is simple and easy to read. Your explanation of the situation is concise and to the point. I liked that you put the contact information on the top and the bottom and that you opened with an apology.
I would however talk a little more about what the customer bill of rights is but other than that it looks good!

Mon, 07/02/2007 - 12:16 — Soo

Comment

I think you have strong press release. I liked how you provided contact information before your introduction and again emphasized at the end by repeating it. You clearly showed why and what happened as well what they have worked to solve the problem. My little suggestion is that how about changing into 10 instead of ten to look more consistent like you used 250 at the end of that sentence. Also if you could break it down to three or four paragraphs instead just two, I think it would be easy to follow and sound more organized. But I think you showed the purpose of writing press release clearly.