Overall your information looks pretty good. I would combine some of your paragraphs, because they are so short and have relevant information. I would combine the second, third, and fourth paragraphs. In the first paragraph I would focus more on just the news because this is what this paragraph is supposed to address. You had good contact information and did apologize and show what the company is doing to make changes. I would keep JetBlue consistent when you write it because it varies in the document. I liked the use of their logo and overall I think that you did a pretty good job, I would just consider making a few changes that I mentioned above.
this is a pretty press release. The enlarged trademark for Jetblue looks pretty impressive and gives it a formal sense. When i was going through your press release i noticed that there are two paragraphs which are too small. i think you should try and merge them with other paragraph. Like in the second paragraph where you have talked about the compensation amounting to $16 million.......can be merged with the Customer bill of rights paragraph. Other than that its a good release.
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Overall your information looks pretty good. I would combine some of your paragraphs, because they are so short and have relevant information. I would combine the second, third, and fourth paragraphs. In the first paragraph I would focus more on just the news because this is what this paragraph is supposed to address. You had good contact information and did apologize and show what the company is doing to make changes. I would keep JetBlue consistent when you write it because it varies in the document. I liked the use of their logo and overall I think that you did a pretty good job, I would just consider making a few changes that I mentioned above.
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this is a pretty press release. The enlarged trademark for Jetblue looks pretty impressive and gives it a formal sense. When i was going through your press release i noticed that there are two paragraphs which are too small. i think you should try and merge them with other paragraph. Like in the second paragraph where you have talked about the compensation amounting to $16 million.......can be merged with the Customer bill of rights paragraph. Other than that its a good release.