First off, I think you did a great job on your press release, but I will give a couple ideas I think could help you out. First, I think you should bold the FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE. Also, I would format your title so it is left aligned. My last format comment is I do not think you need to state press release in your document. I believe it seems like everyone should know what it is. Next, I think you did a great job of using quotes from CEO David Neeleman. Also, when I was reading your second paragraph, I think you could leave out a little bit of the information. It sounds to me as if you are trying to make excuses of what happened as opposed to humbly admitting JetBlue's mistake. Overall I think this is a great press release and I think it looks and sounds very professional.
Overall I think your press release is great. I thought the quotes from David Neeleman were great and showed credibility of your release. The format was also exceptional. There were just a couple of things I thought you could improve on.I also think you might could change is the second paragraph. I think it is a little too drawn out. One thing that you could add on to is expanding on the customers bill of rights and more on other ways JetBlue plans to improve. Overall you did a good job!
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First off, I think you did a great job on your press release, but I will give a couple ideas I think could help you out. First, I think you should bold the FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE. Also, I would format your title so it is left aligned. My last format comment is I do not think you need to state press release in your document. I believe it seems like everyone should know what it is. Next, I think you did a great job of using quotes from CEO David Neeleman. Also, when I was reading your second paragraph, I think you could leave out a little bit of the information. It sounds to me as if you are trying to make excuses of what happened as opposed to humbly admitting JetBlue's mistake. Overall I think this is a great press release and I think it looks and sounds very professional.
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Overall I think your press release is great. I thought the quotes from David Neeleman were great and showed credibility of your release. The format was also exceptional. There were just a couple of things I thought you could improve on.I also think you might could change is the second paragraph. I think it is a little too drawn out. One thing that you could add on to is expanding on the customers bill of rights and more on other ways JetBlue plans to improve. Overall you did a good job!