Jet Blue Press Release
this is my press release. It was really hard for me since i have never written one before. please feel free to leave comments.
this is my press release. It was really hard for me since i have never written one before. please feel free to leave comments.
Comments
Very good overview of the
Very good overview of the situation that occurred. The press release was not too detailed and emphasize the most important areas for the readers to gain information about the incident. You followed the 10 tips to write a press release very well ie: no fancy language, contact information, brief description of incident, first 10 words are effective, etc. The only negative is to change the sizing of the P in passengers and the contact information should be placed on towards the top of the page. Overall, it looks great. Your information accomplishes a press release's purpose of delivering a piece that is very newsworthy. The piece also accomplishes the task of using language for public to relate to and understand.
Peer Evaluation
Your Press Release draft was very good. It followed the 10 tips of a good press release. It contained good details and procedures to take. Good Job!
press release
While all of your information is good, overall this reads like another news article. What you want to do is have the first paragraph be a synopsis (no more than a few sentences)of who, what, where and when, with your second paragraph expaning the information. Think of it this way... you are a representative of jetblue writing TO a newspaper to try and get your side of the story out.
otherwise, some format issues you may want to consider, having your contact information at the top, a "title" as well as the very first line having the location of the story. Most press releases i've seen go something like:
"Title"
CITY, STATE -