WOW! That is a ton of information, and thus a ton of text in the brochure. I like the section that includes sending in the form if you are interested in volunteering. The font and color scheme is pretty much consistant throughout the brochure, but on the second page the text is a smaller font size and light grey and I think that might make it tough to read with the decreased lead space (IE the amount of space between lines). Also, there are a few instances in the mini-calender section that the font is either cut off or out of allignment. That stuff is a pretty easy fix though. One thing I would suggest is bolding the dates you can volunteer for each segment. Making the dates stand out allows people to go through the dates quickly instead of forcing them to search though the short paragraph. The last thing I want to mention is how the brochure opens up after being folded. Now, my spatial reasong sucks, but I was trying to figure out what order the brochure would read if you folded it. Like I said, it may be fine but I'd double check anyways.
Good Luck on the final draft.
With the first glance at your brochure I realize you have a lot of information! I think your group did a great job of providing information without making it look overly cluttered. One thing I do think you could work on is the professionalism of the brochure. Something you might be able to change to affect this is the font. Also, pictures have a big impact on how professional a document is. I am kind of torn here since I think it is great you have included actual pictures from the establishment, yet those pictures are not very stylish/sophisticated. I like how you broke up the white background of the brochure with color. However, I do have to say that I think a color other than grey might be appropriate. When I think of Christmas, I think of green and red. Maybe a more translucent form of green or red behind the words would be better. It is also interesting to me that this was generated in word. We used Microsoft Publisher as our application and it made the process of designing and placing SO much easier.
When I look into the details of this brochure I see that on the second page some words are unreadable since they flow over into the black background. Also, under Setup: Dec 22-24….the 24 is running into the next line which becomes a little confusing. Under this paragraph, check in is also overflowing into the next box. Lastly, I just want to some up your highlights.
• The information is relevant and the layout is very readable.
• The pictures relate to the text well.
• The format is excellent and you do a good job with the white space.
Like everyone is saying there is a lot of information on your brochure but it is all relevant information. It does not look over cluttered. I would still however try and condense some information if possible. I think you guys made really good use of pictures. I think using pictures from the establishment gives it a really good touch!
Also i did think that the orange text against the grey background is not too appealing to the eye and it even makes the text a little hard to read but other your color contrast on the second page was well done.
I also liked the way you guys sectioned off what you could volunteer for if the font could increase a little it would be perfect. All in all though I think you guys did a really good job!
Perhaps an important overall comment about these brochures is that CFRC thinks of Christmas Day Dinner as a community event, not just a handout for under-priviledged people. As such, we don't want to single out those individuals.
Maybe it was just an issue between different versions of Word, but the gray background on the color version looked very strange. It only appeared where there was text.
Has the color version been printed? It seems like the peach text won't be very readable on the gray background.
Some of the white text from the color version doesn't show up in the grayscale version.
The CFRC contact info appears to be in a different font than the rest of the brochure.
SHARE Mentor can be removed from "What services do we offer?" (it just ended recently).
The picture above "Poinsettia Delivery" should be removed. It's from a different event.
Edit volunteer job descriptions for flow. Most of them were just jotted notes, but you can make them read better.
We would prefer it if the volunteer job descriptions were in chronological order, starting on the first panel with procurement and ending with take down.
The picture with Pick Up Team doesn't really correspond. The Pick Up Team runs errands (like your description says). The picture would be more appropriate for take down.
The sentence "Struggling families can get the help they need to provide a beautiful meal and presents for their children at Christmas time" needs to be removed.
The numbers 3000 and 1000 need commas.
The 1,000 gifts go to children in attendance rather than "needy families."
Under Christmas Day Volunteers, kitchen help includes move than just dishes. The term "kitchen help" is probably more appropriate.
Because we don't want to single anyone out, the statement about donations should be changed from "another way to help those in need" to "another way to help."
The last paragraph on the volunteer form can probably be removed. It repeats what it said at the top of the form.
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Correction
I think I have been able to fix the problem we were having with the background disappearing when we uploaded the color version. Here is the new file.
Peer Review
WOW! That is a ton of information, and thus a ton of text in the brochure. I like the section that includes sending in the form if you are interested in volunteering. The font and color scheme is pretty much consistant throughout the brochure, but on the second page the text is a smaller font size and light grey and I think that might make it tough to read with the decreased lead space (IE the amount of space between lines). Also, there are a few instances in the mini-calender section that the font is either cut off or out of allignment. That stuff is a pretty easy fix though. One thing I would suggest is bolding the dates you can volunteer for each segment. Making the dates stand out allows people to go through the dates quickly instead of forcing them to search though the short paragraph. The last thing I want to mention is how the brochure opens up after being folded. Now, my spatial reasong sucks, but I was trying to figure out what order the brochure would read if you folded it. Like I said, it may be fine but I'd double check anyways.
Good Luck on the final draft.
Peer Review
With the first glance at your brochure I realize you have a lot of information! I think your group did a great job of providing information without making it look overly cluttered. One thing I do think you could work on is the professionalism of the brochure. Something you might be able to change to affect this is the font. Also, pictures have a big impact on how professional a document is. I am kind of torn here since I think it is great you have included actual pictures from the establishment, yet those pictures are not very stylish/sophisticated. I like how you broke up the white background of the brochure with color. However, I do have to say that I think a color other than grey might be appropriate. When I think of Christmas, I think of green and red. Maybe a more translucent form of green or red behind the words would be better. It is also interesting to me that this was generated in word. We used Microsoft Publisher as our application and it made the process of designing and placing SO much easier.
When I look into the details of this brochure I see that on the second page some words are unreadable since they flow over into the black background. Also, under Setup: Dec 22-24….the 24 is running into the next line which becomes a little confusing. Under this paragraph, check in is also overflowing into the next box. Lastly, I just want to some up your highlights.
• The information is relevant and the layout is very readable.
• The pictures relate to the text well.
• The format is excellent and you do a good job with the white space.
Good luck with the rest of your project!
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Like everyone is saying there is a lot of information on your brochure but it is all relevant information. It does not look over cluttered. I would still however try and condense some information if possible. I think you guys made really good use of pictures. I think using pictures from the establishment gives it a really good touch!
Also i did think that the orange text against the grey background is not too appealing to the eye and it even makes the text a little hard to read but other your color contrast on the second page was well done.
I also liked the way you guys sectioned off what you could volunteer for if the font could increase a little it would be perfect. All in all though I think you guys did a really good job!
Comments from CFRC
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