The two brochures you have provided do a good job or describing potential hazards for pets, how they are to be treated, and good persuasion techniques to let a person know that the humane society could really use their help. The brochure flows together very well. For example, in the pet care brochure, you introduce the topics that you will be discussing on the front half of the brochure, and actually describe them in detail on the back page. After reading through everything, it is evident your group did plenty of research on the topic, but I feel the brochure would be stronger if you condense the text down a little bit. A person reading through this may find it overwhelming. As a reader, I would have enjoyed seeing more pictures, especially on the back side of the first brochure. We know from the readings in this class that the pictures are supposed to correlate with the text, so try to find images to suit the points. You can probably find pictures for housebreaking and vaccinating your pet. You may even find one for spay and neuter although you may want to try to avoid that picture for obvious reasons.
For other aspects of the display, you might want to reconsider a different color scheme. The white background seems a little boring, and the colors don’t clash together too well with the lime green, navy blue, and orange. However, this brochure seems to be a little more formal, almost like something you would see at a veterinarian’s office, so you don’t want to make it too flashy either. Also, you put the contact information of the first brochure twice. I think having it one time will suffice.
Again, your structure of the brochure is very good. Certain parts preface other parts and it is easy to read and follow along. I just suggest you chop up the text up a little bit and make it an even easier read. This was a very good draft, and your revisions to transition this to the final product can be very minimal and you will still have a solid document.
After reviewing both of the group’s brochures, I think that the group has worked how to use the concepts provided in the text to make a brochure that stands out to the readers. The first thing in the brochures that caught my attention was the use of bold text boxes that provided direction in the brochure. Each section of the brochure is clearly titled. The information provided on the front of the brochure is great because it gives plenty of information, yet is not loaded with wording. This is not the case on the back of brochure where there is a lot of text which can distract the reader. Instead, try limiting the amount of text and add more pictures and illustrations like the front of the brochure includes. One suggestion to add more to the brochure would to add more color. The white background gives the brochure a clean, organized look, but adding a soft color in the background may be more appealing. Another suggestion I have is to make the first page of the brochure stand out more by adding more color and bolder text. This is the page is will attract the readers attention, so try make it stand out more than the other pages of the brochure. Your group utilized key concepts in brochures such as proximity in relation to the pictures and text. Also the group used alignment of the text boxes and text to establish a relationship between all of information provided in each column.
I think both of these brochures are look very nice. I like the covers on both of them. I think that they are eye catching and look professional. I think the visual effects you put on both brochure is neat.
In your pet brochure I think you did a good job to utilize images on the outside of the brochure. I think you could do something to the housetraining page though to make it fill up then entire page. I really like the arrow you have as well. The layout is nice and helps your eye follow through it. There is also some extra space on by the address. I think maybe you should make this address bigger. Overall I think it looks nice continue to revise and make sure the text is invigorating.
Your second brochure is also very eye catching. The colors and the lay out are good. I like how you put the hours of operation on the front page as well. Overall the inside is nice. The text doesn’t seem too overwhelming and seems to flow well. It seems to me that 2 of your headings are either different fonts or bold. Was this on purpose? Also why do you not have a heading for “Donations?” This could catch the reader’s eye and get them to that section quicker if they are interested in helping the humane society. Overall nice job! I like the creativity.
Both of these brochures are very easy to read. The pictures chosen are of different dogs and are very cute and eye catching too. The information is very good especially for someone who doesn’t know a lot about caring for dogs. I liked that you explained the types of vaccinations and which dogs would be more susceptible to those diseases. I also liked that you bolded certain parts of the text that were really important.
For the brochure on “How to take care of your New Dog” I would suggest adding more color on the second page of the brochure. The first seems to have more text boxes with different colors that stand out but the second page is mostly text that is all the same color besides the headlines. For more color, I would try adding a background color. It is easy to read on white but a light color could add some contrast for the reader. I also think the second page needs more pictures especially a picture to fill the white space under “Housetraining”. I think a picture of a crate with or without the dog would be a good picture to add there. Under the Spay/Neuter section, the second sentence says “we are doing are best” should be “we are doing our best.”
The general information brochure seems to be somewhat overwhelming with all the text. The information is very good and important but I would try to split the text up with a picture. I think it would be easier to read if there was a picture to break up all the text. “Checks can sent to” should be changed to “Checks can be sent to” or “Send checks to.” Under the Pure-breds sections, I would take out the word “or”. I would just start with “Contact”. Other than those changes, I think the brochures are great and have great information! Although I can’t get a pet now, I definitely will get one from the humane society instead of a pet store when I do! Good job!
roup #4 Info:
O.K. I don't know what to say. The front is, well, boring. I feel bad for saying that since the picture is of US! It doesn't give me a warm, fuzzy feeling. TEMPERAMENT, please remove the sentence "Who wants a cat that hides under the bed when your children try to pet her?" PURE-BREDS, 2nd sentence needs changed. Maybe, "If you are looking for a specific breed, please check your shelter first." ECONOMICS, 3rd sentence, change to "You may pay a nominal fe to adopt but in some cases those first year medical expenses - like spaying or neutering and vaccines - are already taken care of. ITEMS WE NEED, please remove blankets, rugs and towels. We are flooded right now. Also please remove grooming supplies: shampoo and flea dip/shampoo. Change laundry soap to HE laundry soap and remove pine sol. Under office supplies please remove rubber bands, paper clips and staples. Again, we have more than we could use. We REALLY liked the next paragraph about every give makes a
difference. It was worded well. The very back prayer is not us. How about listing where people can view our animals online or something like that? Also, we would like some warm fuzzy. Maybe some pictures.
Group #4 Care:
We liked this overall brochure. The only thing we didn't like is the dotted line thing. It makes the brochure look like the lines aren't straight even though they are. We especially liked the paragraph on the front. It gives you the warm fuzzies. HOUSETRAINING, how about a picture in the open area at the bottom? RABIES, maybe a statement there saying "Check your local ordinances to follow the laws in your area." A NOTE ON PUNISHMENT, this is o.k. but should be on the back instead of the 1st think when you open the brochure. PREVENTIONS, We like the picture of the flea life cycle. However, theat paragraph needs rewritten. We cannot endorse a product and some animals do not need frontline. Yes, they need something, but I, for example, have a cat that looses his hair where frontline is applied and we have to use revolution or advantage for him. That should just say something like monthly flea protection is the best way to prevent fleas. Check with your
veterinarian for a program that's right for you there instead of down below and maybe elaborate on the flea life cycle as well. Overall, good!
Comments
Peer Edit
The two brochures you have provided do a good job or describing potential hazards for pets, how they are to be treated, and good persuasion techniques to let a person know that the humane society could really use their help. The brochure flows together very well. For example, in the pet care brochure, you introduce the topics that you will be discussing on the front half of the brochure, and actually describe them in detail on the back page. After reading through everything, it is evident your group did plenty of research on the topic, but I feel the brochure would be stronger if you condense the text down a little bit. A person reading through this may find it overwhelming. As a reader, I would have enjoyed seeing more pictures, especially on the back side of the first brochure. We know from the readings in this class that the pictures are supposed to correlate with the text, so try to find images to suit the points. You can probably find pictures for housebreaking and vaccinating your pet. You may even find one for spay and neuter although you may want to try to avoid that picture for obvious reasons.
For other aspects of the display, you might want to reconsider a different color scheme. The white background seems a little boring, and the colors don’t clash together too well with the lime green, navy blue, and orange. However, this brochure seems to be a little more formal, almost like something you would see at a veterinarian’s office, so you don’t want to make it too flashy either. Also, you put the contact information of the first brochure twice. I think having it one time will suffice.
Again, your structure of the brochure is very good. Certain parts preface other parts and it is easy to read and follow along. I just suggest you chop up the text up a little bit and make it an even easier read. This was a very good draft, and your revisions to transition this to the final product can be very minimal and you will still have a solid document.
Instructor Comments
My comments are attached.
Peer Editing
After reviewing both of the group’s brochures, I think that the group has worked how to use the concepts provided in the text to make a brochure that stands out to the readers. The first thing in the brochures that caught my attention was the use of bold text boxes that provided direction in the brochure. Each section of the brochure is clearly titled. The information provided on the front of the brochure is great because it gives plenty of information, yet is not loaded with wording. This is not the case on the back of brochure where there is a lot of text which can distract the reader. Instead, try limiting the amount of text and add more pictures and illustrations like the front of the brochure includes. One suggestion to add more to the brochure would to add more color. The white background gives the brochure a clean, organized look, but adding a soft color in the background may be more appealing. Another suggestion I have is to make the first page of the brochure stand out more by adding more color and bolder text. This is the page is will attract the readers attention, so try make it stand out more than the other pages of the brochure. Your group utilized key concepts in brochures such as proximity in relation to the pictures and text. Also the group used alignment of the text boxes and text to establish a relationship between all of information provided in each column.
Peer Comments
I think both of these brochures are look very nice. I like the covers on both of them. I think that they are eye catching and look professional. I think the visual effects you put on both brochure is neat.
In your pet brochure I think you did a good job to utilize images on the outside of the brochure. I think you could do something to the housetraining page though to make it fill up then entire page. I really like the arrow you have as well. The layout is nice and helps your eye follow through it. There is also some extra space on by the address. I think maybe you should make this address bigger. Overall I think it looks nice continue to revise and make sure the text is invigorating.
Your second brochure is also very eye catching. The colors and the lay out are good. I like how you put the hours of operation on the front page as well. Overall the inside is nice. The text doesn’t seem too overwhelming and seems to flow well. It seems to me that 2 of your headings are either different fonts or bold. Was this on purpose? Also why do you not have a heading for “Donations?” This could catch the reader’s eye and get them to that section quicker if they are interested in helping the humane society. Overall nice job! I like the creativity.
Peer Edit
Both of these brochures are very easy to read. The pictures chosen are of different dogs and are very cute and eye catching too. The information is very good especially for someone who doesn’t know a lot about caring for dogs. I liked that you explained the types of vaccinations and which dogs would be more susceptible to those diseases. I also liked that you bolded certain parts of the text that were really important.
For the brochure on “How to take care of your New Dog” I would suggest adding more color on the second page of the brochure. The first seems to have more text boxes with different colors that stand out but the second page is mostly text that is all the same color besides the headlines. For more color, I would try adding a background color. It is easy to read on white but a light color could add some contrast for the reader. I also think the second page needs more pictures especially a picture to fill the white space under “Housetraining”. I think a picture of a crate with or without the dog would be a good picture to add there. Under the Spay/Neuter section, the second sentence says “we are doing are best” should be “we are doing our best.”
The general information brochure seems to be somewhat overwhelming with all the text. The information is very good and important but I would try to split the text up with a picture. I think it would be easier to read if there was a picture to break up all the text. “Checks can sent to” should be changed to “Checks can be sent to” or “Send checks to.” Under the Pure-breds sections, I would take out the word “or”. I would just start with “Contact”. Other than those changes, I think the brochures are great and have great information! Although I can’t get a pet now, I definitely will get one from the humane society instead of a pet store when I do! Good job!
Humane Society Comments
roup #4 Info:
O.K. I don't know what to say. The front is, well, boring. I feel bad for saying that since the picture is of US! It doesn't give me a warm, fuzzy feeling. TEMPERAMENT, please remove the sentence "Who wants a cat that hides under the bed when your children try to pet her?" PURE-BREDS, 2nd sentence needs changed. Maybe, "If you are looking for a specific breed, please check your shelter first." ECONOMICS, 3rd sentence, change to "You may pay a nominal fe to adopt but in some cases those first year medical expenses - like spaying or neutering and vaccines - are already taken care of. ITEMS WE NEED, please remove blankets, rugs and towels. We are flooded right now. Also please remove grooming supplies: shampoo and flea dip/shampoo. Change laundry soap to HE laundry soap and remove pine sol. Under office supplies please remove rubber bands, paper clips and staples. Again, we have more than we could use. We REALLY liked the next paragraph about every give makes a
difference. It was worded well. The very back prayer is not us. How about listing where people can view our animals online or something like that? Also, we would like some warm fuzzy. Maybe some pictures.
Group #4 Care:
We liked this overall brochure. The only thing we didn't like is the dotted line thing. It makes the brochure look like the lines aren't straight even though they are. We especially liked the paragraph on the front. It gives you the warm fuzzies. HOUSETRAINING, how about a picture in the open area at the bottom? RABIES, maybe a statement there saying "Check your local ordinances to follow the laws in your area." A NOTE ON PUNISHMENT, this is o.k. but should be on the back instead of the 1st think when you open the brochure. PREVENTIONS, We like the picture of the flea life cycle. However, theat paragraph needs rewritten. We cannot endorse a product and some animals do not need frontline. Yes, they need something, but I, for example, have a cat that looses his hair where frontline is applied and we have to use revolution or advantage for him. That should just say something like monthly flea protection is the best way to prevent fleas. Check with your
veterinarian for a program that's right for you there instead of down below and maybe elaborate on the flea life cycle as well. Overall, good!