I think you have a good start on your brochure. The bright green and red is a little overwhelming but the colors fit the occasion. I like the front cover because the reader immediately knows what the brochure is about. The contact information is easy to find and will help readers a lot. I also like how you added in real pictures. The actual pictures give the brochure a more personal feel and allow the reader to see what happens at this event. The way you gave details for each volunteer opportunity is great. It makes it much easier to distinguish activities. The shading in the background of this area is alright – maybe try to coordinate the background color with the rest of the brochure. I also like how you included the mission statement for the CFRC. This is very appropriate for this case. The writing is very simple and fits the audience. Make sure you go through your grammar to make sure it reads easily. For example, the left most page of the brochure on page 1 could be edited. The text read “The CFRC puts together this event to guarantee members of the community have a place they can go on Christmas.” To make it read easier, try writing something like “The CFRC puts together this event to guarantee members of the community a place to go on Christmas.” The mail in form is also looking good. Maybe put an extra space above the name line to give a little room and make it easier to read. These are just a few suggestions. I think you are off to a good start. By tweaking a few things, you can have a great brochure.
From the looks of your brochure, your group has a good start to the project. The overall layout of the brochure is very nice, however, there are a few things that I would consider changing. The first thing that I would change is the color scheme. Using Christmas colors is a very good idea, but using bright red and bright green are a little bit overwhelming to me. That is the one thing that I would consider changing for the final draft. Now that I have given a suggestion for something to change, I would like to talk about the things that are appealing to the reader. First of all, I like your use of actual pictures in your brochure. This helps the reader who has never been a part of this event to get a first hand look of what really goes on at this Christmas party. Secondly, I like how you explain in detail what all it takes to put this event on. Included with this, it is nice how you added the section about how to simply make a donation. I am sure there are plenty of people who would like to help out, but just can not make it that day. By being able to donate this gives these people a way to help out the community even if they can not be there in person. Lastly, I really like how you used the principles of conciseness and proximity. You were concise and to the point with your information and this is very good because it will keep your reader interested in what you have to say. Also, you used the idea of proximity very well also. This really draws the reader in and makes them feel as though they were a part of the Christmas Party. Overall, I would work with the color scheme to tone it down a bit. Other than that you have a great brochure.
I think overall your brochure looks great! The first thing came into my mind before I start reading the brochure was the colors you used. The Christmas colors, green and red gave me a clear idea about what this brochure was about. You absolutely chose the right color and used it consistently till the end. I especially liked how you put around both colors in the borders dividing each pages. But I think it would be even better if you consider using darker colors of red and green. It looks little bright scattering the reader’s attention. Usually bright colors makes reader’s eye more tired than dark colors.
The contents are well divided into each category giving enough yet simple explanation. I think it was effective to use pre-event volunteer position as a chart. Each position was clearly divided with exact date and time so that as a reader, it was easy to make decision which position to volunteer. Also it was good idea to provide web address at the bottom of the chart so that readers can find more details about. I liked how you used actual pictures of volunteering once again giving clear and more realistic idea about this Christmas day Dinner. However the date and time you provided for Christmas Day Volunteers is bit awkward. It looks like it doesn’t have enough space to fit in. Also how about using the dotted line like the rest instead of just black box you put around Christmas Day Volunteer. It was nice to provide volunteer form at the second page but I think the address line there is bit too small. By using some spaces left in the form, I think you can give more spaces to write the address. Overall your brochure looks good and especially I think you followed the conciseness and proximity rules very well. With some of revisions I think you will end up with amazing brochure!
I really liked the brochure in the first go! The Christmas colors of bright red and bright green make the brochure look really attractive. I just feel that you should add some light background may be with a Christmas tree which will make the bright colors stand out. The reader knows in a glance that the brochure is about Christmas. The front cover is perfect and gives the reader an idea of what the brochure is about. I feel that the font of the volunteer form could be made a little bigger by removing the picture from below. I must say that you all have chosen the perfect pictures. It’s really wonderful how the pictures from the past events stand out and of course they would give the readers a better idea of the event. Looking at the pictures, the readers would be encouraged to volunteer as well as donate. I liked how your group has put the important information in a dotted line box. Keeping this in mind, I feel you should change the dotted box of the quotation into a dotted line box. This is just a suggestion to keep consistency. I don’t think that the ‘Pre Event Volunteer Positions’ needs a box. The heading stands out by itself. I appreciate the idea of the dividing all the information equally. Every event had a clear date and timing mentioned. The contact information in the brochure was clear and easily noticeable. The rest of the information in the brochure was also apt and I don’t think there was anything extra. Along with the past pictures, I also liked the details given from 2006. I feel the two pictures of the Santa clause are very similar. May be you could change one of them, to a different version. But overall I think your brochure looks great and with some of these minute changes, it could look perfect. Great job!
Comments
Peer Edit
I think you have a good start on your brochure. The bright green and red is a little overwhelming but the colors fit the occasion. I like the front cover because the reader immediately knows what the brochure is about. The contact information is easy to find and will help readers a lot. I also like how you added in real pictures. The actual pictures give the brochure a more personal feel and allow the reader to see what happens at this event. The way you gave details for each volunteer opportunity is great. It makes it much easier to distinguish activities. The shading in the background of this area is alright – maybe try to coordinate the background color with the rest of the brochure. I also like how you included the mission statement for the CFRC. This is very appropriate for this case. The writing is very simple and fits the audience. Make sure you go through your grammar to make sure it reads easily. For example, the left most page of the brochure on page 1 could be edited. The text read “The CFRC puts together this event to guarantee members of the community have a place they can go on Christmas.” To make it read easier, try writing something like “The CFRC puts together this event to guarantee members of the community a place to go on Christmas.” The mail in form is also looking good. Maybe put an extra space above the name line to give a little room and make it easier to read. These are just a few suggestions. I think you are off to a good start. By tweaking a few things, you can have a great brochure.
Peer Review
From the looks of your brochure, your group has a good start to the project. The overall layout of the brochure is very nice, however, there are a few things that I would consider changing. The first thing that I would change is the color scheme. Using Christmas colors is a very good idea, but using bright red and bright green are a little bit overwhelming to me. That is the one thing that I would consider changing for the final draft. Now that I have given a suggestion for something to change, I would like to talk about the things that are appealing to the reader. First of all, I like your use of actual pictures in your brochure. This helps the reader who has never been a part of this event to get a first hand look of what really goes on at this Christmas party. Secondly, I like how you explain in detail what all it takes to put this event on. Included with this, it is nice how you added the section about how to simply make a donation. I am sure there are plenty of people who would like to help out, but just can not make it that day. By being able to donate this gives these people a way to help out the community even if they can not be there in person. Lastly, I really like how you used the principles of conciseness and proximity. You were concise and to the point with your information and this is very good because it will keep your reader interested in what you have to say. Also, you used the idea of proximity very well also. This really draws the reader in and makes them feel as though they were a part of the Christmas Party. Overall, I would work with the color scheme to tone it down a bit. Other than that you have a great brochure.
Peer Edit
I think overall your brochure looks great! The first thing came into my mind before I start reading the brochure was the colors you used. The Christmas colors, green and red gave me a clear idea about what this brochure was about. You absolutely chose the right color and used it consistently till the end. I especially liked how you put around both colors in the borders dividing each pages. But I think it would be even better if you consider using darker colors of red and green. It looks little bright scattering the reader’s attention. Usually bright colors makes reader’s eye more tired than dark colors.
The contents are well divided into each category giving enough yet simple explanation. I think it was effective to use pre-event volunteer position as a chart. Each position was clearly divided with exact date and time so that as a reader, it was easy to make decision which position to volunteer. Also it was good idea to provide web address at the bottom of the chart so that readers can find more details about. I liked how you used actual pictures of volunteering once again giving clear and more realistic idea about this Christmas day Dinner. However the date and time you provided for Christmas Day Volunteers is bit awkward. It looks like it doesn’t have enough space to fit in. Also how about using the dotted line like the rest instead of just black box you put around Christmas Day Volunteer. It was nice to provide volunteer form at the second page but I think the address line there is bit too small. By using some spaces left in the form, I think you can give more spaces to write the address. Overall your brochure looks good and especially I think you followed the conciseness and proximity rules very well. With some of revisions I think you will end up with amazing brochure!
Peer Edit
I really liked the brochure in the first go! The Christmas colors of bright red and bright green make the brochure look really attractive. I just feel that you should add some light background may be with a Christmas tree which will make the bright colors stand out. The reader knows in a glance that the brochure is about Christmas. The front cover is perfect and gives the reader an idea of what the brochure is about. I feel that the font of the volunteer form could be made a little bigger by removing the picture from below. I must say that you all have chosen the perfect pictures. It’s really wonderful how the pictures from the past events stand out and of course they would give the readers a better idea of the event. Looking at the pictures, the readers would be encouraged to volunteer as well as donate. I liked how your group has put the important information in a dotted line box. Keeping this in mind, I feel you should change the dotted box of the quotation into a dotted line box. This is just a suggestion to keep consistency. I don’t think that the ‘Pre Event Volunteer Positions’ needs a box. The heading stands out by itself. I appreciate the idea of the dividing all the information equally. Every event had a clear date and timing mentioned. The contact information in the brochure was clear and easily noticeable. The rest of the information in the brochure was also apt and I don’t think there was anything extra. Along with the past pictures, I also liked the details given from 2006. I feel the two pictures of the Santa clause are very similar. May be you could change one of them, to a different version. But overall I think your brochure looks great and with some of these minute changes, it could look perfect. Great job!
Comments from CFRC
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