I really like the way your brochure presents itself. The cover page definitely attracts the reader’s attention because of the combination of text and images you chose to put in it. The red colors look really good all over the brochure; it helps to keep the audience interested since it creates great contrast within all the panels. I also like that you chose to include images in every panel that helps transmit the message the text is sending towards the reader; I would only recommend that you try to resize some of them (like the one with the dog and the vet) since it looks stretched out. You also seem to use a lot of repetition throughout the brochure which I think is a good thing because you keep things simple since you do not confuse the reader.
About the text, I think you can improve on its fluency. When I read the brochure, I get the feeling that I’m reading bullet points instead of fluent sentences. Also, there is one type-o in the brochure. In the “New Family Member” panel, in the first paragraph, you write “welcomed” which should be changed to “welcome”. Overall, I think your brochure is great and off to a really good start. I just think that you should focus more on resizing the images to make the brochure have a better fit and become much more attractive. Great work though!
Overall, I think your group did a good job with your brochure. The front panel of the brochure is very eye catching, and not too busy, so you should successfully capture your audience’s attention. You successfully implemented the idea of repetition to really get your message across to the reader. Also, you were consistent with the color and size of the red headings you used for each paragraph. The information you presented was very relevant to your topic and has a sensible, chronological transition from one section to the next, which I consider to be important in a brochure that is giving directions.
I like the pictures you used, but I agree with Marius. A few of them need to be resized for good picture quality since stretched picture do not transfer well onto paper. One other thing I had an issue with was the text on the page. I found it difficult to read on my screen. The word “welcomed” should be “welcome” in the “New Family Member” panel to make stronger grammatical sense. The information you use in your paragraphs make sense and hold a lot of important data that your audience will want to know, however it seems like too much text for a brochure. I would reconsider the format just a bit, and maybe implement some bullets with the most useful information that you want your audience to read. This way, they can be informed without spending too much time reading. Good Job!
My first impression of your group's brochure is that it is neatly laid out, the visual design is attractive, and a good use of images is used to persuade a reader to adopt a pet. Your information is very informative, but could use a little tweak in the economics section. I don’t think a person would be encouraged to adopt a pet if your information states "it’s your responsibility to ensure that you are economically stable enough to support and fully take care of your pet". Your selection of images does a very good job of catching the readers’ eye, breaking up the information and creating a positive atmosphere of pet ownership. In agreement with the other group members, I think the picture in the in your second document needs to be reformatted and not stretched. I like your use of consistency with clipart and color throughout the brochure which reiterates the passion in this organization and also attracts an audience's attention. Your placement of visuals is significant in their respective content area. The alignment used is very structured and neat with a nice flow of images on each page.
The information is very short, direct and readable. There is a distinct variation of sentences lengths, which adds to the document's readability. Overall, I really enjoyed reading your brochure and is presented in a pleasant format that would conduct much interest on this topic. Great work!!
Group #3 Care:
The overall brochure is good. We didn't like the picture on the front cover. That chick takes away from the dog. We all felt like she was too prominant for the cover. ECONOMICS, love the part about the breakdown of financial responsibility. Awesome job! HOUSETRAINING has a typo in the paragraph. HEARTWORM & FLEAS, Fleas is spelled wrong in the title and in the paragraph. We also liked our picture on the back. Could you please expand the use of viewing our animals online at www.cchumane.petfinder.org.
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Peer Edit
I really like the way your brochure presents itself. The cover page definitely attracts the reader’s attention because of the combination of text and images you chose to put in it. The red colors look really good all over the brochure; it helps to keep the audience interested since it creates great contrast within all the panels. I also like that you chose to include images in every panel that helps transmit the message the text is sending towards the reader; I would only recommend that you try to resize some of them (like the one with the dog and the vet) since it looks stretched out. You also seem to use a lot of repetition throughout the brochure which I think is a good thing because you keep things simple since you do not confuse the reader.
About the text, I think you can improve on its fluency. When I read the brochure, I get the feeling that I’m reading bullet points instead of fluent sentences. Also, there is one type-o in the brochure. In the “New Family Member” panel, in the first paragraph, you write “welcomed” which should be changed to “welcome”. Overall, I think your brochure is great and off to a really good start. I just think that you should focus more on resizing the images to make the brochure have a better fit and become much more attractive. Great work though!
Group Brochure Peer Review
Overall, I think your group did a good job with your brochure. The front panel of the brochure is very eye catching, and not too busy, so you should successfully capture your audience’s attention. You successfully implemented the idea of repetition to really get your message across to the reader. Also, you were consistent with the color and size of the red headings you used for each paragraph. The information you presented was very relevant to your topic and has a sensible, chronological transition from one section to the next, which I consider to be important in a brochure that is giving directions.
I like the pictures you used, but I agree with Marius. A few of them need to be resized for good picture quality since stretched picture do not transfer well onto paper. One other thing I had an issue with was the text on the page. I found it difficult to read on my screen. The word “welcomed” should be “welcome” in the “New Family Member” panel to make stronger grammatical sense. The information you use in your paragraphs make sense and hold a lot of important data that your audience will want to know, however it seems like too much text for a brochure. I would reconsider the format just a bit, and maybe implement some bullets with the most useful information that you want your audience to read. This way, they can be informed without spending too much time reading. Good Job!
Instructor Comments
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Peer Review
My first impression of your group's brochure is that it is neatly laid out, the visual design is attractive, and a good use of images is used to persuade a reader to adopt a pet. Your information is very informative, but could use a little tweak in the economics section. I don’t think a person would be encouraged to adopt a pet if your information states "it’s your responsibility to ensure that you are economically stable enough to support and fully take care of your pet". Your selection of images does a very good job of catching the readers’ eye, breaking up the information and creating a positive atmosphere of pet ownership. In agreement with the other group members, I think the picture in the in your second document needs to be reformatted and not stretched. I like your use of consistency with clipart and color throughout the brochure which reiterates the passion in this organization and also attracts an audience's attention. Your placement of visuals is significant in their respective content area. The alignment used is very structured and neat with a nice flow of images on each page.
The information is very short, direct and readable. There is a distinct variation of sentences lengths, which adds to the document's readability. Overall, I really enjoyed reading your brochure and is presented in a pleasant format that would conduct much interest on this topic. Great work!!
Humane Society Comments
Group #3 Care:
The overall brochure is good. We didn't like the picture on the front cover. That chick takes away from the dog. We all felt like she was too prominant for the cover. ECONOMICS, love the part about the breakdown of financial responsibility. Awesome job! HOUSETRAINING has a typo in the paragraph. HEARTWORM & FLEAS, Fleas is spelled wrong in the title and in the paragraph. We also liked our picture on the back. Could you please expand the use of viewing our animals online at www.cchumane.petfinder.org.