Your press release is good, I like how you put a title to it and your first paragraph is really good. It starts out with an apology, and gives very detailed information about the crisis and how the company does not accept this treatment to its customers. I think the second paragraph could be elaborated more with details about the refunds and vouchers since that is the title of the press release and you mention it briefly within the letter. The crisis itself in the first paragraph should not be the most elaborated part of the letter since it is not mentioned in the title. The last paragraph is also very good and a sense of professionalism and seriousness is transmitted all throughout the letter. As mentioned before, you need to elaborate the body paragraph more so it concurs with the title of the press release itself. Good job on the tone.
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Your press release is good, I like how you put a title to it and your first paragraph is really good. It starts out with an apology, and gives very detailed information about the crisis and how the company does not accept this treatment to its customers. I think the second paragraph could be elaborated more with details about the refunds and vouchers since that is the title of the press release and you mention it briefly within the letter. The crisis itself in the first paragraph should not be the most elaborated part of the letter since it is not mentioned in the title. The last paragraph is also very good and a sense of professionalism and seriousness is transmitted all throughout the letter. As mentioned before, you need to elaborate the body paragraph more so it concurs with the title of the press release itself. Good job on the tone.