English 420Y - Business Writing Online

This week was a very busy week since we had our project due on Wednesday. We were able to receive comments on our work and had time to correct them. Roy, which was the person handling the comments and corrections for the humane society, did an excellent job. I read over the comments for both the pet brochure and the humane society, after seeing the correction that took place, I sent my approval and the brochures were sent. Furthermore, this week I am again preparing the activity report to conclude this class.

This week in my participation decreased a bit since I had to travel back to the US and thus had a limited access to the internet for a bit. Yet, before departing I was able to comment on the brochure in order to prepare our second draft. Futhermore upon my arrival to the US I immediatly communicated with my group, catching up with all the e-mails and finally completing the week with the weekly activity report.

Appeal to emotions: (+) I think we did an excellent job in this part we describe a situation in which a person can easily relate to. See on the brochure a note for punishment as the example.
Be Professional: (+) I think our brochure does look professional with good quality pictures and graphics.
Be Personal: (+) In this area we did an excellent job, we target our audience, portraying situations in which the audience can identify itself.

It seemed that dividing up the work worked better for our group. We divided the work into gathering information, designing the brochures, and revising the work. Since one of our members is really acquainted with pet he volunteered to work complete the pet brochure. On the other hand, Maria worked on the design of the brochure while Roy created the information brochure for the humane society and I was responsible for revising it.

After reading chapter twenty-four and thirty-seven, I found it hard to implement the theories explained. When creating a brochure with a target to children it’s hard to implement the four sentence types explained in the readings. Yet, I believe we did a very good job in trying to be both, concise and varied in our sentences structure. There are a couple of paragraphs that I believe are a bit too long, but then shortening them would leave important details out. It is also very important the image and picture implementation.

As for our first assigmente, I think it went well given the fact that we are working virtually and that its was kind of hard to divide up the work. As soon as I heard about my group I sent an e-mail to all my group members letting them know about the fact that I am 2 hours earlier than the rest (Colombia) and the fact that I was going to try my best to get things accomplished. All the other group members kind of did the same explaining what the situation was.

Here is the FINAL COPY OF GROUP 4 GANT CHART. 9:00 P.M INDIANA TIME.

The reading Brochure I found can be seen at:
http://www.ricoh.com/r_dc/support/brochure/pdf/r30.pdf .

I think the first page of the brochure is very efficient, it calls attention, its contrasting, accurate, and pertinent. Yet the second part of the brochure (pg 2) has a lot of writting jammed into it. If looks crowed and its very confusing. It lacks contrasts, however its very pertinent to the specification and requierements one must know when purchasing a camera.

I tried to put it in PDF, but it was impossible with my internet connection to utilized DACs. I tried downloading the software from:
http://dacs.ics.purdue.edu

There are many theories that support the benefits of group projects. As a matter of fact, in Krannert, almost all classes have huge group projects that are supposed to teach us about the real world. Recruiters, often ask you question about experiences working in groups, yet, I believe group projects to be unrealistic, complicated and contra productive. In a long distance course this can be even more complex. To start with, we don’t have a meeting place other than a virtual chat or post, time differences with different schedule and activities can add to the complexity.