English 421Y: Technical Writing Online

When I first saw your design I thought it was very clean professional looking. I really liked how you used the spacing within the text to place your sample pictures. Also, I the blue column on the left side helps bring attention to the sample text in it. You might consider switching the sample text on the left in the blue to a bulletin style setup (if it’s not one already). The line break below your heading works well with your concept design. The negative spacing in the white paper works where you applied it. I like the blue but maybe think about switching it to a lower opacity. Nice work.

I like the overall layout of your thumbnail. It has a very clean layout and flows well. The use of space is also well done. There is minimal white space and everything seems to fit in its place. I like the sidebar on the left, would be a good place to put key terms/info for the reader to refer to. I also think you did a good job placing the graphic within the text, it doesn't take away from the flow of the content. The only thing I would change is the color. The blue works well but I think it is too bold. We might consider using a shade that is softer and doesn't stand out too much from the text.

Overall, I think your thumbnail is very clean and professional-looking. I like the color scheme, the font set-up and the headings. One comment is that since this is a white paper, I think the sections will take up more space than you've given them with that font size. If our white paper is to be effective, we'll have a lot of information to cover. Another comment I have is that I think we should limit the use of screenshots as images. They take up a lot of space and they don't really provide much of a basis for making and supporting an argument. For example, what the image shows is that opera has a speed dial, the usefulness of which I feel was more effectively described in SHU's research blog on Opera. Again, we don't have that much space to work with since the white paper isn't supposed to be that long, so I think we should be very strategic with our images.