Analyzing your resume I have found great aspects of your resume as well as some that need improvement. First the good, your layout is really nice, organized and easily readable. Your name is prompt and very recognizable. Your experiences are great examples of your back ground for future employment. I like where you have” *Work experience reflect the last 3 years”. The learning project reflects having a great interest in engineering. Also it conveys that you explain yourself to different genres of audience. Having personal interests are good by showing what type of person you are outside of work and school. Overall, I am able to distinguish different topics and accumulate important information.
Here are my suggestions. Looking at both of your address your comma should be located between the city and state. Your objective statement provides a good understanding of what you want to do, but it doesn’t have a sells pitch to it. You may try improving the objective statement by using “to obtain a position using my knowledge to excel company growth….ect…” make them want you to work for them. The learning project and the experiences do not have power verbs. Using the tct and the Thompson Hand Book, find words to make your examples more powerful. Align the bullets up to make symmetric. Under the D&M Construction instead of having the first two bullets try to combine and try to make your skills not run on. For the third bullet you should use certified operator rather than “can drive”.
Isaac, you have a great start. Your resume has taken shape and defining a part of you that you are advertising to companies. I hope my suggestions will help you. After you have made corrections, have multiple friends, family, and other critics criticize. Good luck!
Submitted by winninraces on Fri, 02/06/2009 - 23:16.
Isaac,
First, I should let you know that I selected yours as one of the five I would have called for an interview after our short review. Obviously this means that you did a great job catching my eye and your resume stood out from everyone elses. That being said, I have some points I would like to touch on that can make it even better.
Like the other commentor said, the comma is wrong in the address and your allignment is off by one space in your education section. These are things that HR people will throw away resumes for. You absolutely cannot have any grammatic mistakes, or people can use that as an excuse not to hire you.
I would also leave your high school information off the page, people can assume you graduated high school and really only care about your college degree. That being said, if you were in clubs or leadership activities that are relevant, list them.
I also agree that your learning project is impressive, but in my opinion, it shouldn't have its own heading on your resume. I would place it under work experience and do everything you can to talk that baby up. Give some details about what you did during the experience. How many kids did you work with, how many were there, those type of quantified statements give employers perspective on what actually happened and what you learned from it.
The last comment I will make is that I think you have attempted to use action words, but your statements about your work experience, and skills don't do an effective job selling you. I would try to give more specific details about the things you did in very short sentences. I drew the conclusion that you know how to use mechanical devices from your work experience, so don't tell the reader that again in your skills section. Use that space to talk about more things that you did. If you don't have any more, don't repeat what you already said, make your font bigger so it's easier to read.
I hope these comments will help as you tweak your resume for the future
Resume Critique
Analyzing your resume I have found great aspects of your resume as well as some that need improvement. First the good, your layout is really nice, organized and easily readable. Your name is prompt and very recognizable. Your experiences are great examples of your back ground for future employment. I like where you have” *Work experience reflect the last 3 years”. The learning project reflects having a great interest in engineering. Also it conveys that you explain yourself to different genres of audience. Having personal interests are good by showing what type of person you are outside of work and school. Overall, I am able to distinguish different topics and accumulate important information.
Here are my suggestions. Looking at both of your address your comma should be located between the city and state. Your objective statement provides a good understanding of what you want to do, but it doesn’t have a sells pitch to it. You may try improving the objective statement by using “to obtain a position using my knowledge to excel company growth….ect…” make them want you to work for them. The learning project and the experiences do not have power verbs. Using the tct and the Thompson Hand Book, find words to make your examples more powerful. Align the bullets up to make symmetric. Under the D&M Construction instead of having the first two bullets try to combine and try to make your skills not run on. For the third bullet you should use certified operator rather than “can drive”.
Isaac, you have a great start. Your resume has taken shape and defining a part of you that you are advertising to companies. I hope my suggestions will help you. After you have made corrections, have multiple friends, family, and other critics criticize. Good luck!
Zebulon Rouse
Building a great resume
Isaac,
First, I should let you know that I selected yours as one of the five I would have called for an interview after our short review. Obviously this means that you did a great job catching my eye and your resume stood out from everyone elses. That being said, I have some points I would like to touch on that can make it even better.
Like the other commentor said, the comma is wrong in the address and your allignment is off by one space in your education section. These are things that HR people will throw away resumes for. You absolutely cannot have any grammatic mistakes, or people can use that as an excuse not to hire you.
I would also leave your high school information off the page, people can assume you graduated high school and really only care about your college degree. That being said, if you were in clubs or leadership activities that are relevant, list them.
I also agree that your learning project is impressive, but in my opinion, it shouldn't have its own heading on your resume. I would place it under work experience and do everything you can to talk that baby up. Give some details about what you did during the experience. How many kids did you work with, how many were there, those type of quantified statements give employers perspective on what actually happened and what you learned from it.
The last comment I will make is that I think you have attempted to use action words, but your statements about your work experience, and skills don't do an effective job selling you. I would try to give more specific details about the things you did in very short sentences. I drew the conclusion that you know how to use mechanical devices from your work experience, so don't tell the reader that again in your skills section. Use that space to talk about more things that you did. If you don't have any more, don't repeat what you already said, make your font bigger so it's easier to read.
I hope these comments will help as you tweak your resume for the future
Mike Sheridan