The first thing that catches my eye when I look at your resume is the top part. This is just my opinion, but I think it looks a little cleaner and more professional if you have your name at the top center. As far as your addresses go most people tend to put home on one side and then school on the opposite side while trying to make each side symmetric, but you may like this way better. In the readings we did about resumes, most of them explained how you should gear your objective towards the company you are trying to gain employment with. You can try to do this by explaining how you plan to help out their company, and not how the job will help satisfy your needs. When I look at your resume as a whole the text appears to be fuzzy and you can’t really tell the bold from the normal print. You may want to change the font or make it bigger. In you work experience section you might want to explain what you did in each of these jobs. It appears that you just listed where you worked and didn’t give any information on what you did. Try to think of a specific title that you could associate with what you did at each of these places and give a few bulleted listings of particular activities you did at each one. If you add those bulleted activities to your experience it will also help add a little more text to the main part of your resume and get rid of some of the blank areas.
I hope this information is useful to you. I don’t want to make it sound like I am a professional at this because I am far from it. I just thought I would list some things that I think may help you out a bit.
Submitted by HiggsBoson on Thu, 02/05/2009 - 22:57.
I am going to be brutally honest here with this critique.
The first thing I noticed was the large amount of empty space. There is some at the bottom, the left side and some more at the top left and top middle. You can solve the top blank spots by making it more symmetric with the two different addresses or make the text bigger. The alignment on of the topics reminds me of a MS word template, this need to be adjusted. Either revamp the style or at least align the corresponding text so that is is starting more to the left-under the section titles (Objective, Education, ect) The headings on your entries for education and work experience are trumped by the text that is describing-consider making the headings stand out more than the rest of the text. Now for content. The objective statement should be a fragment usually starting with the word 'To', as in "To use my skills to do something wonderful for the company and/or humanity." Since you're not listing GPA I would, personally, put education towards the bottom. The work experience portion needs a lot more detail. In each entry, add what you did-starting with the parallel action verbs (refer to the instructor's blog), and you need to add what you learned or skills you obtained. Activities needs to be renamed to something more general to encompass, more accurately, your entries for this section. Also in this section, list what you have done/are doing. I would say that the volunteer section can be omitted completely unless those entries relate somehow to your profession-if so, say what that is. Lastly, just a general thing-add lots of key words.
Hope this helps
The first thing that catches my eye when I look at your resume is the top part. This is just my opinion, but I think it looks a little cleaner and more professional if you have your name at the top center. As far as your addresses go most people tend to put home on one side and then school on the opposite side while trying to make each side symmetric, but you may like this way better. In the readings we did about resumes, most of them explained how you should gear your objective towards the company you are trying to gain employment with. You can try to do this by explaining how you plan to help out their company, and not how the job will help satisfy your needs. When I look at your resume as a whole the text appears to be fuzzy and you can’t really tell the bold from the normal print. You may want to change the font or make it bigger. In you work experience section you might want to explain what you did in each of these jobs. It appears that you just listed where you worked and didn’t give any information on what you did. Try to think of a specific title that you could associate with what you did at each of these places and give a few bulleted listings of particular activities you did at each one. If you add those bulleted activities to your experience it will also help add a little more text to the main part of your resume and get rid of some of the blank areas.
I hope this information is useful to you. I don’t want to make it sound like I am a professional at this because I am far from it. I just thought I would list some things that I think may help you out a bit.
Critique
I am going to be brutally honest here with this critique.
The first thing I noticed was the large amount of empty space. There is some at the bottom, the left side and some more at the top left and top middle. You can solve the top blank spots by making it more symmetric with the two different addresses or make the text bigger. The alignment on of the topics reminds me of a MS word template, this need to be adjusted. Either revamp the style or at least align the corresponding text so that is is starting more to the left-under the section titles (Objective, Education, ect) The headings on your entries for education and work experience are trumped by the text that is describing-consider making the headings stand out more than the rest of the text. Now for content. The objective statement should be a fragment usually starting with the word 'To', as in "To use my skills to do something wonderful for the company and/or humanity." Since you're not listing GPA I would, personally, put education towards the bottom. The work experience portion needs a lot more detail. In each entry, add what you did-starting with the parallel action verbs (refer to the instructor's blog), and you need to add what you learned or skills you obtained. Activities needs to be renamed to something more general to encompass, more accurately, your entries for this section. Also in this section, list what you have done/are doing. I would say that the volunteer section can be omitted completely unless those entries relate somehow to your profession-if so, say what that is. Lastly, just a general thing-add lots of key words.