English 421Y: Technical Writing Online

Your resume has some great information on it and it looks like you have plenty of good, relevant experience for the job you're applying for. I think if you change just a few things about your presentation of the information, your resume could be much stronger!

The first thing I noticed about your resume was that everything had it's own bullet. I'm not sure this is an effective way to use bullets, nor is it the first thing you want a potential employer to notice!! You have a clear visual heirarchy, but the bullets just make the page seem very busy, and they don't help draw the readers eye to anything in particular. I would suggest only using bullets for the lowest information in the heirarchy, i.e. just for the points underneath each job experience, and maybe for your flight experience. The indentation and boldface text create enough heirarchy for the titles taht I don't think you need a bullet, too. If anything, I definitely wouldn't use the bullets for your section headings.

You have a lot of white space around the edges of your page, and it's almost distracting. It looks like you have a little room, and I think that it would help the legibility of your information if you spaced things out a bit vertically. This also has to do with your columns. I think your information would be a lot more easy to get to if you gave yourself a right-hand column for the dates of your work experience, graduation, etc.

The last thing I would take a look at it is your objective statement. The readings all focused a lot on what to put in an objective statement if you're going to include one. You simply state the position you're applying for, but the company probably already knows that and they don't really care what you want. Like the Instructor Blog #2 suggested, I think you should focus on the specific things that you can offer THEM, and not what you'd be getting out of the gig.

Hope this helps! You have all the great information to work with, I just think it's a matter of presenting it in a more appealing fashion. Unfortunately, I think the presentation is overly important for resumes!

At first glance at your resume I noticed the large open areas on each side. Your resume looks very loaded in the middle with large margins. I think if you worked on using a little more of a column format it would help with the extra space on the edges. I think if you took out the bullet points for your main sections that would help pull some of that text into the extra white space that seems to be a bit of a problem. You may consider putting the date that you worked at each location off to the right to help fill some of that space on the right. I liked how you had good detail for your job descriptions. Your layout is fairly simple and consistent which helps with reading it. I think that you could benefit from using mixed fonts instead of just altering the text for each heading. I think this would also help to break up your sections a little more. Right now it feels like the whole resume just runs together quite a bit. Possibly some simple spacing between each section could help to guide the eye to each individual section more. Overall though I think you have the right idea.