hey matt pretty good resume. You have a lot of great credentials, especially the Exxon internship and your GPA. Your objective statement kind of leaves me hanging. Computer information technology is a broad field covering probably every industry. I'd consider narrowing down where you'd like to go with your degree, and including that in the objective statement. Or at least tailor-make it towards whatever specific position you're applying for.
I think the layout is well done. I like the time line on the right margin. It might look a bit cleaner if the dates were aligned to the left, like the side column of this website. It just takes a little screwing around with margins. There's also a good deal of white space at the top and bottom of the resume. I'd suggest you break out your relevant coursework section into a bulleted list. It would make that section easier to navigate as well as eat up some blank space.
I’d like to begin with a readily obvious pro. First and foremost, your resume possesses one of the most effective layouts of all those submitted. The manner in which you utilize all of the allotted real estate yields an easy to read and professional document. Now, I will suggest some possible enhancements.
- Objective: Although the general guideline suggests not being too specific in your objective, I feel your objective might not be specific enough. Consider elaborating more in your desired position, more so than simply a “position in the field of computer information technology.”
- Education: The only concern with your education section is how much is included. As suggested in the “Instructor’s Blog #2: Resumes,” one should only include relevant coursework if it is beyond the requirements of the major. Whereas some of that mentioned is applicable, much of it is goes with the CNIT major.
- Work Experience: The primary concern in this section is specificity. One of the most common critiques I receive from upper-level management is to “be more specific in your experience.” This makes sense as it outlines what you have to offer to the company. Recall the following quotation from the Rockport Institute: “A great resume doesn’t just tell them what you have done but makes the same assertion that all good ads do: If you buy this product, you will get these specific direct benefits.” So for example, you denote that you developed and synchronized existing business warehouse components while working at ExxonMobil. Consider including the software applications you used and the specific components you developed. The same applies to the remainder of your work experiences, what technologies did you use throughout your global meetings; what data software did you use to track the load issues of the enterprise SAP production systems, and what were those systems, etc? As I am told, companies what to know precisely what you are familiar with.
- Spelling and Grammar: Although a bit extreme, it may be advantages to review thoroughly the spelling, grammar, and punctuation in your resume. For example, the spacing in your GPA should be consistent, so the slash (/) should be surrounded by spaces, or no spaces, not just the trailing space it has now. Also, the courses listed in your Relevant Coursework section should all be separated by commas, even those that begin new lines; C# programming and LAN systems Administration end the lines and are followed by a comma whereas Unix Administration and Windows Server 2003 do not. Finally, the ‘h’ in Hardware on the last line of your Work Experience should not be capitalized.
Overall I was really impressed with your resume but feel it would benefit if the aforementioned corrections and enhancements were applied as well as others you may encounter.
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hey matt pretty good resume. You have a lot of great credentials, especially the Exxon internship and your GPA. Your objective statement kind of leaves me hanging. Computer information technology is a broad field covering probably every industry. I'd consider narrowing down where you'd like to go with your degree, and including that in the objective statement. Or at least tailor-make it towards whatever specific position you're applying for.
I think the layout is well done. I like the time line on the right margin. It might look a bit cleaner if the dates were aligned to the left, like the side column of this website. It just takes a little screwing around with margins. There's also a good deal of white space at the top and bottom of the resume. I'd suggest you break out your relevant coursework section into a bulleted list. It would make that section easier to navigate as well as eat up some blank space.
Specify, Specify, Specify
I’d like to begin with a readily obvious pro. First and foremost, your resume possesses one of the most effective layouts of all those submitted. The manner in which you utilize all of the allotted real estate yields an easy to read and professional document. Now, I will suggest some possible enhancements.
- Objective: Although the general guideline suggests not being too specific in your objective, I feel your objective might not be specific enough. Consider elaborating more in your desired position, more so than simply a “position in the field of computer information technology.”
- Education: The only concern with your education section is how much is included. As suggested in the “Instructor’s Blog #2: Resumes,” one should only include relevant coursework if it is beyond the requirements of the major. Whereas some of that mentioned is applicable, much of it is goes with the CNIT major.
- Work Experience: The primary concern in this section is specificity. One of the most common critiques I receive from upper-level management is to “be more specific in your experience.” This makes sense as it outlines what you have to offer to the company. Recall the following quotation from the Rockport Institute: “A great resume doesn’t just tell them what you have done but makes the same assertion that all good ads do: If you buy this product, you will get these specific direct benefits.” So for example, you denote that you developed and synchronized existing business warehouse components while working at ExxonMobil. Consider including the software applications you used and the specific components you developed. The same applies to the remainder of your work experiences, what technologies did you use throughout your global meetings; what data software did you use to track the load issues of the enterprise SAP production systems, and what were those systems, etc? As I am told, companies what to know precisely what you are familiar with.
- Spelling and Grammar: Although a bit extreme, it may be advantages to review thoroughly the spelling, grammar, and punctuation in your resume. For example, the spacing in your GPA should be consistent, so the slash (/) should be surrounded by spaces, or no spaces, not just the trailing space it has now. Also, the courses listed in your Relevant Coursework section should all be separated by commas, even those that begin new lines; C# programming and LAN systems Administration end the lines and are followed by a comma whereas Unix Administration and Windows Server 2003 do not. Finally, the ‘h’ in Hardware on the last line of your Work Experience should not be capitalized.
Overall I was really impressed with your resume but feel it would benefit if the aforementioned corrections and enhancements were applied as well as others you may encounter.
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Justin, I appreciate the thoroughness of these comments.