English 421Y: Technical Writing Online

To start things off, your resume does a pretty good job of capturing my attention. It has a good layout, and doesn't waste very much white space. However, the blocks of black that act as the highest level bullet seem to throw the resume out of balance, especially if just glanced at from a distance. I would recommend changing the blocks of solid black to a smaller and more elegant style of bullet.

Your objective statement is clear as to what you desire, but most companies want to hear how you will benefit them as well. The strongest point of your resume to me is your work experience. You have plenty of job experience in your career, and also shows how you have progressed in your field. I would value this even more than your outstanding GPA's in 3 distinct majors! My recommendation would be to reorder your resume placing your work experience above your academic credentials.

Your statements describing your work experience show how you’ve been an important asset for the companies you’ve either worked or interned for. You make good use of concrete facts such as “Achieved 40 times faster performance,” Statements like these brag about your skills in a way that’s professional and believable. I also like how you’ve included patents on your resume. This shows your entrepreneurial side while highlighting some impressive work you’ve completed. Overall, an employer would definitely give your resume a second look.

To start out with, you have a very impressive resume. You also have a very clear and concise objective that shows your interest in that specific job. I think overall you did a good job keeping things clear and easy to read and making effective use of space. You also did a good job making sure to use consistent parallel verbs though out the whole resume.

However I agree with Zephyrus that your objective statement could tell the company more about what you could offer them. Although after looking through your extensive work experience and patents, I think it would be clear to an HR person what a benefit you would be to a company.

Overall I would say it is an excellent resume and follows almost all the advice we were given in the last weeks readings about verb usage, formatting, quantifying what you did with real numbers and so on. If I were to make any changes I would put your work experience and the fact that you have patents higher up in the resume. The amount of work experience and having patents were the two things that stood out the most to me on your resume.