Nigel, you have a good cover letter. There are a couple of things that need to be addressed, but for the most part you have everything you need.
Format and Style
1) You have all the components the only thing I would change would be the salutation. You have “Dear Rose Smith,” to “Dear Mrs. Smith:” use this for a reference http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/653/01/
2) Yes everything lines up to the left on the left margin
3) I feel the letter needs to be revised with word choice to make it a little more formal.
4) The author’s has the correct tone. He announces what he is capable of and not in a bragging manner.
5) I haven’t seen any spelling errors.
Content / Rhetorical Content
1) While reading I didn’t feel that I was being spoken to about a specific job. You need to add a few key words for specific details for the job ad.
2) I feel that you can mention a few more specific details in your paragraphs.
3) While writing about his previous internship, he acknowledged terms used in industry.
4) There was not a specific position that is mentioned in the opening paragraph. Also there wasn’t a source of where you found the job ad at.
Overall, I think you did well in writing the cover letter. With a few changes that I mentioned above, I feel that you will be able to improve your resume.
Should I do my heading differently, or is this formal format better?
- I think you may consider using the header from your resume.
Should it be longer, or is the length ok?
- I would try to increase your length by another paragraph or two. With this you can give them more information that you may have worked on with another job.
Cover Letter Critique
Nigel, you have a good cover letter. There are a couple of things that need to be addressed, but for the most part you have everything you need.
Format and Style
1) You have all the components the only thing I would change would be the salutation. You have “Dear Rose Smith,” to “Dear Mrs. Smith:” use this for a reference http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/653/01/
2) Yes everything lines up to the left on the left margin
3) I feel the letter needs to be revised with word choice to make it a little more formal.
4) The author’s has the correct tone. He announces what he is capable of and not in a bragging manner.
5) I haven’t seen any spelling errors.
Content / Rhetorical Content
1) While reading I didn’t feel that I was being spoken to about a specific job. You need to add a few key words for specific details for the job ad.
2) I feel that you can mention a few more specific details in your paragraphs.
3) While writing about his previous internship, he acknowledged terms used in industry.
4) There was not a specific position that is mentioned in the opening paragraph. Also there wasn’t a source of where you found the job ad at.
Overall, I think you did well in writing the cover letter. With a few changes that I mentioned above, I feel that you will be able to improve your resume.
Should I do my heading differently, or is this formal format better?
- I think you may consider using the header from your resume.
Should it be longer, or is the length ok?
- I would try to increase your length by another paragraph or two. With this you can give them more information that you may have worked on with another job.
Zebulon Rouse