Let’s start with your address information, it looks really dull. You can probably spice it up by posting your permanent address to the right of it and your name bold at the top. As for your paragraphs your introduction and conclusion are really well done. The only thing that needs work is the body of your paragraph. You should really split it up into about three paragraphs. One talking about your skills, and the other two paragraphs should talk about your two separate internships.
To answer your questions, I do not think the tone of the letter was too technical. You were able to express your talents using the language of which you would be working in. I also think you talked about your experiences well enough.
Cover Letter Review
Let’s start with your address information, it looks really dull. You can probably spice it up by posting your permanent address to the right of it and your name bold at the top. As for your paragraphs your introduction and conclusion are really well done. The only thing that needs work is the body of your paragraph. You should really split it up into about three paragraphs. One talking about your skills, and the other two paragraphs should talk about your two separate internships.
To answer your questions, I do not think the tone of the letter was too technical. You were able to express your talents using the language of which you would be working in. I also think you talked about your experiences well enough.