Do I have too much useless information in my paragraphs?
Did I include enough information to prove that I am the right person for the job?
Do I have too much useless information in my paragraphs?
Did I include enough information to prove that I am the right person for the job?
Cover Letter
I like the heading you have with all of your information laid out clearly for the HR Coordinator to read. It’s a very nice format.
Now to answer your first question, I did not think you had too much useless information in your paragraph. They explained what you learned while at Purdue and helped sell yourself. I guess that also answers your second question. You put a lot of information that proved that you are the right person for the job. The only thing I could see using work would be the last paragraph. It feels awkward when you relist your qualifications again and then say you can be reached. A transitional sentence would be a good addition. Maybe state that you are looking forward to an interview.
As for your form and style, your cover letter reads well, you should just make your cover letter in a block style of text. To do this, highlight everything and press Ctrl+J and your paragraphs will look more uniform than before.