English 421Y: Technical Writing Online

I think you have a great cover letter. You hit on a lot of strong points and did a great job selling yourself. All the necessary components were there and as for your question about the header, the only problem I really see with it would be that the contact information is a little small. It might help just to up it one size to make it stand out a little more. I also questioned the amount of white space around the edges; it could just be that I am still stuck in resume mode. I also thought you really hit the nail on the head with your tone and style. Your grammar was good (I am not very good at grammar so maybe check again) and everything seemed to flow very nicely.

I was unable to find your job add, apparently monster.com closed it, so my only concern would be to make sure you were relevant to the job add. I really don’t know what an agricultural representative at National City Bank would do, so I can only assume your experience and aim was correct. I also noticed there you didn’t really state why you were applying for this position. It might help to include that, along with why you would want a job at a bank, seeing that banking and agriculture are not the most similar professions.

I also think you did a good job with your terminology and selling yourself to a bank specifically. I noticed you went with a stronger business approach as opposed to using agricultural lingo. This is important since your applying to National City Bank and not a fertilizing company.
Your introduction was strong as well. You did a good job of stating specific reason you were suited for this position, and supported each with work experience and example throughout the rest of the letter. Likewise your conclusion was also done nicely. My only comment would be if telling them that you are going to contact them might come off a little strong. I really don’t know this but that was my initial impression. Maybe it wouldn’t hurt to talk to someone who knows a little more about it.

The only thing I can really thing of to improve would be maybe to fill the page up a little more, maybe a larger font or smaller margins. I think you really did a great job being specific with you experiences and making them relevant in you letter. This is a great cover letter will no doubt benefit you down the road.

Form and Style
1. Your letter contains all the necessary items.
2. Block Format
3. I think your style of letter is good for this position.
4. I think that your tone tells that you are sincere in looking at this position. You sound very interested in this position since you say that you will be contacting them.
5. I didn’t see any spelling or mechanical errors.
Content/Rhetorical Context
1. I believe you did a good job describing what skills you possess.
2. You mention that you feel you are the perfect person for the position.
3. Good use of terminology that others in the field would know about.
4. I think you did a good job describing your skills and knowledge for why you would be a good fit for the position.
5. You ended well by saying that you plan on contacting them again and where they can contact you.
6. I think that there aren’t any major revisions to be made. I think that you did a good job with this cover letter.
Writer’s Questions
I think that you used a good simple layout for your letter. Your letter is easy to view and eye appealing. I think that you did a good job describing your experiences and telling about your knowledge and how it would help you to fill this position.