English 420Y - Business Writing Online

Frusterating. That is what I would describe this week. We get through the WHOLE PROJECT and the only mess up we have is on the final project. I moved back to school midweek, and with my recent medical problems it was NOT an easy job. It took me until tonight to get internet and Laura had a similar situation. Actually, I think hers was worse as she had to DRIVE back from Atlanta to Indiana. The question I keep asking myself is how much room for error does the average professional plan for?

After going through the past 2 weeks and having 2 drafts on the brochures, I felt pretty confident in my group's work. We had received positive feedback from both our instructor and our peers and our major strength seemed to be our brochures "professionalism". Then the client comments came into play and I don't know how the rest of my group felt, but I was kind of let down by their comments. Some of the things they said, while not mean in any way, rubbed me the wrong way. The biggest thing was that they said our brochure was boring, BORING!

Appeal to Emotions: +
Even people who don't currently own a pet can be moved by the idea of helping animals. Since both of our brochures deal with domesticated animals, specifically in the adoption, caring for an housing of said animals, the emotion appeal is easily identified whenever we speak of the help the shelter gives.
Be Professional: +

Whew boy was this week ever fun. Our team was determined to organize itself a little better after the Gantt chart was finished, after all, we had a few days before the first draft of the brochures were due. Unfortunately we ran into a few small problems, none of which were anyone’s fault. Laura was working like crazy on assignment is Las Vegas, meanwhile, Samana was dealing with internet issues in India. Like I said, no fault by anyone, it is just what happens when you have a group of students working remotely of one another during the summertime.

Gen Info brochure attached as a PDF file

Weber Service Learning Group 5 Gantt Chart

Work this week was very low if you looked only at our team output. However, we spent the bulk of the week communicating amongst the team, introducing ourselves and deciding what would be the most efficient use of our time dealing with not being able to physically meet. Thus, despite a low physical output, our comfort level within the team and our confidence has been raised by the fact that messages from team members have offered great insight into our project as well as being timely in their nature.

Reading through chapter 5 I found myself reflecting on the works I had created in the past and the terms and reasoning behind them to my previous works. What I mostly thought of was my state of mind when I was creating the documents and how I used elements from the book but had no idea of the psychological elements behind them. In less complicated language, I used elements such as repitition and contrast because it made the document more visually appealing but if I was asked to explain WHY it was so I could probably do little more than shrug my shoulders and offer a halfhearted "I dunno".

Corporate Com Final Project

Corporate Com Draft