Submitted by DigitalSHU on Fri, 02/06/2009 - 18:54.
At first glance your resume is very cleanly laid out. There is good distribution of information with minimal white space. The only thing I will suggest about the layout is moving your education section to the top to highlight your academic success. The work experience you have included is important, but I think being a new graduate educational background should take precedence.
I like the summary of qualifications, it gives the reader somewhat of an intro the rest of the resume. All of the bulleted points start off with powerful words that draw my attention, but I think some of the points could be cleaned up. For example, “Excellent team oriented skills, having been on a number of engineering teams that have carried out typical projects associated with process engineering.” This point starts out great, but looses my interest towards the end. Try starting strong and ending strong. Maybe something like; …coordinated with engineering teams to complete assigned projects.
The objective statement is well done and clearly states what you would like to do. I don’t think it needs any revision.
Your professional experience section is well laid out but I think it needs to be a little more in depth. The first thing a see when I quickly scan through each job is Description, Description… This doesn’t really catch my attention as far as being something unique or strong. You clearly state what you accomplished at the job but I think it would have a greater effect if you had bulleted points using strong verbs. The parallel verbs would really work nicely here I feel. Action words such as, demonstrated, developed, managed, etc.. These would really give the professional experience section a boost as far as catching the eye. I think making that minor change would really make the experience section easy to pick out information fast.
Overall, great resume, with a few minor tweaks I think it will be a very powerful tool. Hope this helps.
Submitted by winninraces on Fri, 02/06/2009 - 22:54.
Scott,
First, I think you did the most effective job evaluating the resumes of all the comments I read. This shows me that you understand what it takes to create a great resume. I hope that I can give you some tips that will help you improve yours so you always get a call for an interview.
The first thing I would change about your resume is that your name needs to be bigger. It looks like you picked a great font, it just need to be twenty points largers and in BOLD. This will help you simply get noticed by more glancing eyes.
I think your objective is good. In my opinion you repeat yourself when you state what your degree is in during the objective. I would take out the middle and write: To obtain a position with a...company where my knowledge of...can be utilized.
I agree with the other comment that you should also put your education first, but you need to cut some things out of it. Just put the details of where you went to school in that section and then create an additional section after your work experience to tell about your honors and relevant courses.
This next part you can take or leave: I disagree with the other commentor about your summary of qualifications section. I believe that this section is better left for your cover letter. That is the purpose of a cover letter, to summarize your qualifications. If I were you, I would try to incorporate the qualifications that you have into your work experience and tell the reader why you have those skills. Your resume is for listing these skills, not explaining them.
I think you have very good parts to your resume and with very few minor changes, it can be very good.
Minor changes
At first glance your resume is very cleanly laid out. There is good distribution of information with minimal white space. The only thing I will suggest about the layout is moving your education section to the top to highlight your academic success. The work experience you have included is important, but I think being a new graduate educational background should take precedence.
I like the summary of qualifications, it gives the reader somewhat of an intro the rest of the resume. All of the bulleted points start off with powerful words that draw my attention, but I think some of the points could be cleaned up. For example, “Excellent team oriented skills, having been on a number of engineering teams that have carried out typical projects associated with process engineering.” This point starts out great, but looses my interest towards the end. Try starting strong and ending strong. Maybe something like; …coordinated with engineering teams to complete assigned projects.
The objective statement is well done and clearly states what you would like to do. I don’t think it needs any revision.
Your professional experience section is well laid out but I think it needs to be a little more in depth. The first thing a see when I quickly scan through each job is Description, Description… This doesn’t really catch my attention as far as being something unique or strong. You clearly state what you accomplished at the job but I think it would have a greater effect if you had bulleted points using strong verbs. The parallel verbs would really work nicely here I feel. Action words such as, demonstrated, developed, managed, etc.. These would really give the professional experience section a boost as far as catching the eye. I think making that minor change would really make the experience section easy to pick out information fast.
Overall, great resume, with a few minor tweaks I think it will be a very powerful tool. Hope this helps.
Building a great resume
Scott,
First, I think you did the most effective job evaluating the resumes of all the comments I read. This shows me that you understand what it takes to create a great resume. I hope that I can give you some tips that will help you improve yours so you always get a call for an interview.
The first thing I would change about your resume is that your name needs to be bigger. It looks like you picked a great font, it just need to be twenty points largers and in BOLD. This will help you simply get noticed by more glancing eyes.
I think your objective is good. In my opinion you repeat yourself when you state what your degree is in during the objective. I would take out the middle and write: To obtain a position with a...company where my knowledge of...can be utilized.
I agree with the other comment that you should also put your education first, but you need to cut some things out of it. Just put the details of where you went to school in that section and then create an additional section after your work experience to tell about your honors and relevant courses.
This next part you can take or leave: I disagree with the other commentor about your summary of qualifications section. I believe that this section is better left for your cover letter. That is the purpose of a cover letter, to summarize your qualifications. If I were you, I would try to incorporate the qualifications that you have into your work experience and tell the reader why you have those skills. Your resume is for listing these skills, not explaining them.
I think you have very good parts to your resume and with very few minor changes, it can be very good.
Mike Sheridan