English 420Y - Business Writing Online

This week our group worked diligently to make revisions to both of our brochures. I worked on making sure I adhered to both the comments given by Ryan and the Humane Society. I worked on making the content very customer appealing and more geared towards what the Humane Society was asking. Our group worked very well together this week to get our brochures ready for the final draft. Stephen and Daniel worked on revising the Genereal Brochure to perfection, while Cory and I worked on the Caring for your pet brochure.

I started out this week thoroughly looking over the content already written for the past week, and made revisions accordingly. I made sure to fix all the mistakes Ryan found within the brochure. I worked very hard to make sure the content met the standards the Humane Society wants to go by also. I also made sure that everyone in the group made changes accordingly to what Ryan commented on. While re-reading the content of the brochure I found a few of little mistakes that I changed. I also made the brochure more reader friendly.

5:00 Appeal to Emotions: I think our brochures do appeal to emotions because of the humane society feel. Also some of the pictures are very cute with the puppies and kittens, which also appeals to the emotions. +

4:00 Be Professional: I think our brochure is very professional. The graphics are used very well as well as the writing is also professional.+

3:40 Be Personal: Both of the brochures are very personal. I think this part of the test is easy because we are working with the humane society.+

Attached are both the caring for your pet brochure and the general brochure. When printed the brochure will be tri-folded!

This week our group did a good job of communicating with eachother. Everyone did their part to finish the first draft of both brochures. This week my end of the deal was to write the content for the caring for you pet brochure. I did not think this was going to take that long, but it actually required quite a bit of time. The content was fun to write because it was something I did not have much knowledge about, so therefore I had to research the information. The other group members also did their part to contribute in their areas as well.

After reading this weeks material in the handbook, I think overall our group did a good job creating the brochures and using the principles in chapter 37. Through out both of our brochures our group made is a point to change up the lengths of the sentences, and use bullet points to create our content. My job for the service learning project was to create content for the caring for your pet brochure. I made sure to mix up the way I used vocab to make the brochure more interesting for the readings.

I usually find group work very tedious, and sometimes very hard to get everyone on the same page. This time around I found getting in contact with other group members very easy. I worked very late this week and did not receive my emails until late last night. After receiving them I immediately contacted the rest of the group and apologized for my absence. One of my group members had already created the ganatt chart, with the help of the other members.

After reading chapter 25, I found the information to be very helpful. The information is very detailed and designed to help set the brochure up step by step. The chapter helped to explain what was necessary for the brochure to be efficient to all readers. The chapter gave wonderful examples also, which were helpful. I did research and looked through many examples of brochures online. I found a lot I liked, but many were very cluttered. The brochure I hope to make with my other group members will hopefully be very organized.

Here is my Final Draft!

Feel free to make any suggestions!