English 420Y - Business Writing Online

Well it was our last week of class and our group really had a lot of work to do to get our final draft in presentable status. We started by just corresponding through emails about what had to be done based upon on the feedback that we had gotten the week before from fellow students and the CFRC. Then I suggested that someone should compile everything that we have been talking about and all the feedback we have received into a list. Bill stepped forward once again and made a list of revisions that had to be made.

Our team was really productive this week. Everyone was on top of their work and made sure to get it done on time so the next person could work on their part. Ultimately our final draft was done with a lot of time to spare; this allowed us to have plenty of time to make final adjustments. In addition, our group communicated very well via the wiki, updating what they have been working and commenting on the work of others.

During Week 8, I worked very hard to produce a final draft of our brochure. I began the week by finishing the Group Activity Report and submitted it on Sunday. I then sent out an email to our group outlining the plan for the week. I was in charge of finishing the Caring For Your Pet brochure. I received Pratyush’s text and edited it for a few minor errors. I printed off a copy of our second draft and edited the necessary areas. I then used this to make changes for our final draft. I utilized the instructor comments to fix errors such as those in grammar.

Here is our general info brochure.

Here are our final drafts.

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We were having trouble with one of our colors while converting to .pdf format. I could not determine why, but finally found a way around it. I'm updating to reflect this change. Nothing has been changed since the deadline except the problem caused by the .pdf conversion.

This week has been devoted to making the final changes with regards to the comments made from the Humane Society. The biggest concern I had to face dealt with the layout of the General Information Brochure. According to the Humane Society it was “funky and hard to handle.” Seeing how this was all that they specified about the layout, I assumed that they meant that they did not like the way the four column brochure would be created because they would have to use paper that is larger than a standard sheet of computer paper.

Final drafts are attached

Here is our final!

This week I focused on revising some parts of my draft based on the client’s opinion. I removed the word “stationary” from the donation part. As other group members suggested, I tried to add some more information on what donations will be used to. However, I couldn’t find any other usage of donation after interviewing the manager of CFRC community. I emailed about this to my group members to hear their opinions. All of our group members shared some similar ideas about our second draft. We had two alternative messages which might distract readers’ attention.

This week was focused on details. I reviewed the revisions and suggestions by both the client and Mr. Tirrell. In addition, I took the revision suggestions and comments from my peers into consideration while revising for the final draft. This week my group had a meeting on Wednesday. During this meeting, we were able to set the plan for the completion of the project. For example, who is going to do what, and what direction we are going to take in terms of revisions. One main topic discussed was whether to leave our submitted draft 2 a quater fold or return it to a tri-fold.