English 420Y - Business Writing Online

I started the week by making changes to the brochure using the comments from Professor Tirrell and the CFRC. One of my responsibilities for the group was to help write the text, so this is what I focused on. Since I did not help with the first draft because of family problems, I thought it was important to be active in the revising for the second draft. I fixed the small errors in the document and then concentrated on the short paragraphs we have in the brochure. I posted the revised brochure on the wiki page for my group to review.

Week 7 was another good week for Tirrell Group 1 on the service learning project. We started this week out similar to the other weeks. We emailed ideas of the projects’ design and revisions of the text. When revising, we looked at our instructor feedback and took into account the past weeks reading.

This week has been really productive. The second draft was due on Tuesday but I thought it was due on Monday. Thank God I got confused to a day before and not after. It actually turned out to be a positive confusion since I finished the second draft on Monday with the help of Libby. When we got the feedback on draft number one I immediately wrote an email to all of my peers and coordinated with Libby to work on the pet care brochure that was the one we had been working on since the beginning of the project.

This was a very hectic week for my group. For the project this week, I just began making revisions to draft 1 and communicating with my group. My group was given a lot of revision comments for draft 2, but unfortunately we never organized exactly how we were going to make those revisions. I think everyone contributed in some way, but it ended up being on the night it was due myself and another group member sending it back and forth to finish it up.

On Sunday, I e-mailed my group members about meeting times to work on our revision of our first draft. We all realized we had a lot of work to do but we didn’t let the comments on our first draft ruin our work ethic or our teamwork. We remained positive. We met Monday night in an AIM chat room and discussed the main parts of the brochure that needed to be changed. We also brainstormed new ideas for our second draft. Ben started making revisions from our ideas. On Tuesday afternoon, Ben and I discussed the revisions on AIM.

During Week 7, I have worked on revising our brochures. We started the week having feedback on our first draft. I sent out an email to all members with what we had to change. I then gave directions on who should complete what. I emailed individually with Pratyush to discuss our caring for your pet brochure. I talked with him to make sure all parts are original. I then set to work revising our brochure. I edited a few minor places that I had written. I also redesigned the brochure. I switched the colors and the headings to make it more professional and easier to read.

This week was a good week for our team. I think we made great strides to improving our brochure. At the end of last week our team read the comments and was not happy with the results. Over the weekend I began editing the brochure. I made a new cover and edited the image to say, “Bring out the inner santa.” I also redesigned the mail inform to look more professional. I then sent this update to everyone else in the group with other suggestions that they could work on. I was in contact with the group members over the weekend and we discussed our thoughts on changes.

This week went fairly well for our group. At the beginning of the week I focused on revising the design of our brochure to better suit the audience and client. This was a challenge for me again because I'm not that good with Publisher yet. With Rachel as my design partner we were able to make significant changes to the brochure. One thing that kept messing up was the lines on the last page, everytime we emailed a copy of our brochure the lines were not aligned. I fixed the lines and it didn't look right still, finally Bill got the lines to stay.

Whew!

This week started off with editing our project for us to resubmit on Tuesday. Sunday and Monday I was able to work a little on revisions but was forces, because of work, to make most on Tuesday. Since I have been in charge of working on the Humane Society brochure that is the one that I worked on editing. I looked at the comments that were provided by Ryan and tried to improve the brochure. I ended up changing the back cover to remove the directions and instead put a quote and picture. On the inside of the brochure almost all of the text needed to be reworked.