English 420Y - Business Writing Online

After turning ni our very good second draft, I sent out an email at the end of last week saying that I would not be available until Monday night because I was going away for the weekend since it was a long weekend because of a national holiday in Peru. That same Monday I went on the course website to check on the feedback the other classmates gave us as well as the client feedback. I also checked my email and saw that Melissa sent out an email saying that we shoud meet that night at 9pm central time.

This week we decided to meet on Monday to start working on the second draft. Since I did not have the chance to give lots of input for our first draft in the previous week, I decided on Sunday to start the second draft revision by myself. I changed the specific parts mentioned in the feedback you gave us as well as summarize most of the text since I felt we had written too much. I did not summarize it completely since I did not want to decide by myself what parts to eliminate out of the brochure.

5:00 Appeal to Emotions: +
I think our brochure does transmit feelings and emotions along with its message. The combination of its design and text does reach out towards the reader making him comfortable to volunteer or assist CFRC’s Christmas Dinner.

4:00 Be Professional: +
Even though our brochure is designed to give a Christmas feeling to the reader, I think we have conserved professionalism through its design. We do not fill the brochure with excess color and images, although I feel we could add one or two images in certain panels.

3:40 Be Personal: +

Here is our second draft due today, I managed to fix the problem with the check boxes in both versions to be able to turn it in in .pdf format. Feel free to give us any feedback!

This week I met online on Tuesday with Melissa Wood and Melissa Michels and we discussed the parameters of the assignment. Erik could not meet with us at that time because he works nights while the other group members have an internship in the morning and in the afternoon. In our meeting we planned out the contents of the brochure and the order of the information we were providing. We spent a while reading the website talking about the requirements for assignment and how were we going to split up the work.

The draft we presented is on its way to become a much better brochure. We put a few visuals as well as detailed text that describe the event as well as the volunteer opportunities the resource center is offering. I think that we can improve on the visuals of the brochure, since we only offer images in the cover page and the last page. This could definitely add color and attractiveness to the brochure. I believe that the cover page is very well done since it is what the reader first lays his/her eyes on since we have an “attention getting” image.

This week I tried to start communicating with my group via the wiki page, but unfortunately none of my group members replied back. That same day I received an email from one of my teammembers who suggested that we meet through AIM in order to get together as a group. This method did not work well since many of us had internships or other courses, so we had trouble on setting a specific time to meet. Yesterday, I checked my email and saw that there was going to be a group meeting at 8pm Central Time through the chat page the course has designed for us.

This is the Gantt chart Melissa Wood sent us all through an email. I think we should write each other periodically to plan ahead in order to meet all the deadlines set in the chart.

www.miamibeachfl.gov/visitor/pdf/Miami%20Beach%20Brochure%20Web.pdf

This is my final project!