English 420Y - Business Writing Online

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Here is my cover letter. I know it needs a lot of work. Any comments would be helpfull.
Also I am pasting another link of the Job Ad because the ad is not on career builder anymore which is where the original link was from.

http://www.careersinfood.com/index.cfm/fuseaction/jobsearchdetails/JobID...

Hey Guys this is my cover Letter.
I would love to get your valuable responses.
Thank you.

Please give me feedback and comments! I will greatly appreciate it! Thanks!

Here is my cover letter for HDR Design Build for a position as a project manager intern. Any help will be greatly appreciated. Thanks in advance.

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It needs to be shorter! Feedback is appreciated!

Attached is my cover letter. Please comment on it.

Thanks,
Bryce

Please offer any and all comments you have. THANKS!