English 421Y: Technical Writing Online

1. Is my tone of voice to "over the top"?
2. Do I explain my experience in depth enough?

1. Do you like the overall format of the cover letter? Specifically the heading

2. Do I give enough specific examples of my exeriences?

How is my tone?
Should i go into more detail with my experiences?

Cover letter attached.

I was wondering if I did too much explaining my job experience and not enough trying to sell myself. Any help would be appreciated.

Please answer the following:

1. Do I provide sufficient detail in regard to my academic and professional careers?

2. I've elected to use a different header format than was suggested by this weeks readings, which was to use the same from the resume. Is the format that I've chosen still effective and professional?

Do I have too much useless information in my paragraphs?
Did I include enough information to prove that I am the right person for the job?

Is the tone of the letter too technical?
Did I detail my experiences enough?

1) Is the overall length good or do I need less?

2) Are my examples easy to follow?