English 421Y: Technical Writing Online

Do I have too much useless information in my paragraphs?
Did I include enough information to prove that I am the right person for the job?

Is the tone of the letter too technical?
Did I detail my experiences enough?

1) Is the overall length good or do I need less?

2) Are my examples easy to follow?

Is the second paragraph relevant or should I replace it?

Should the cover letter be longer?

1. Do I sound too confident?

2. Should I go into more detail about my work experiences or classroom work?

- Should I do my heading differently, or is this formal format better?
- Should it be longer, or is the length ok?

Some questions for comments:
1.) Does my language balance concision and level of detail?
2.) Did I use enough information about the employing company to show my interest in them?

1- Thorough enough without being too detailed?
2- Do I come off as eager for the opportunity or over confident?

I am not sure who to address this cover letter to as there was no name. Should I use the company name, HR representative, or something else? Also, I know I should add a question or two in it so should I add it to the body or the conclusion of the letter? Would generic or more specific questions about the company be best? Maybe one of each. Also, please comment on the tone and general structure of the cover letter as I have never written one before.

1. Do I need to put more specific details about my previous work/school experiences?
2. Does my format seem correct, or do I need to change it?